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An oil painted serenade
Caressed in satin salmon shades
They spent a night of sweet romance
Forever captured at a glance

The two were one in days of old
She was shy, but he was bold
Together then, their love did grow
Caught in oils, that all would know

Hidden breasts and seductive thighs
Enhanced once more by lovers sighs
Sweet smells of jasmine in the air
Caught in time in their lovers lair

Enticing kisses at lovers tryst
Seductive tease seen through the mists
Portrayed in oils for all to see
Their love revealed for eternity

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  • spirit rising
    December 28, 2008

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    how very softly spoken words, this is beautifull, very visual, i could picture it all and even smell the jasmine, a really lovely poem.


  • Janice M Pickett
    December 27, 2008

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    What a beautiful well rhyming poem I really see this as a winner. *clappy


  • SummerlandRayne gold member
    December 24, 2008

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    Perfectly LOVELY! Such a beutiful expression of sensual desire. I love the pic with this as well. Thank you for the entry!


  • LoveSpell-PurpleRose silver member
    December 24, 2008

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    Excellent!

    I can really see that this poem is flowing straight out of your heart! It is full of emothions as well as imagry.Blessings Be To You Always, Good Luck In This CONTEST ! Brenda Gae BFF


  • RikkiRae silver member
    December 21, 2008

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    A Beautiful Poem!! The imagery that you have utilised is really wonderful while at the same time there is the tasteful description of sensuality that in my opinion is far more alluring than in many other such poems.


  • Happy3
    December 20, 2008
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    "Hidden breasts, and seductive thighs"
    Wow, that's great. Brilliant indeed.


  • Swangrnv gold member
    December 20, 2008
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    wow

    very beautiful and sensual, a definate turn on!


  • VoltaicHypnosis gold member
    December 20, 2008
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    Wow this is delightfully sensual -- well done on an elegantly raunchy write


  • Ademon
    December 20, 2008
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    the flow, the imagery, the purity of this poem is absolutely breath taking and beautiful to the very end!

    Hidden breasts and seductive thighs
    Enhanced once more by lovers sighs
    Sweet smells of jasmine in the air
    Caught in time in their lovers lair

    Awesome!!! "Sweet Smells of Jasmine in the Air" I could almost smell it myself!

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