Here we gather all thinking of you
the fool and the victim
they're drawn out in numerous themes
As sure as the sun will set He loves me
climactic desires, blazing rays of hope
free me from all this pain
Diametric emotions
beneath mother hen it sets for weeks
our world's collide creating brilliant art
A raging fire forms one complete heart
A contest entry
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Comments
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wow!it's really nice..i loved it...
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good poem
well done,written with a strong feeling GORDIE,,
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Diametric emotions --definitely understand that. The overall feelings are clear.
Don't quite follow the reference to brillant art. Lots of great imagery used.
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i think this was creative and there are some very good lines. the last line is really great. it all made sense and was interesting. good job.
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this s beautiful, such amazing imagery.
thanks you for taking the time to enter my contest,
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this was such an interesting contest and the way you fused different lines to create a coherent whole is just great.
great write.
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This is beautiful. It has such wonderful emotions and imagery. The last lines are fantastick. Thank you so much for sharing this piece.
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Welcome To Allpoetry
I agree with Rend, this is awesome! I already have you on my faves, so I know how talented you are! I would like to read new writings, too!!!
Congrats on the feature!!!
Blessed Be,
~Raven
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Now this is awesome!! i love the way your words just flow!!
you need to keep posting new poems, your writes are wonderful!!
you are Featured on todays poems
blessings
Rend
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sometimes people collide like meteors dont they
you obviously have..great poem
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I would wonder if there are other pulses contained within the beat of this piece that are also other orther parts of your poetic heart, for there are a number of perfect thoughts to express so much in almost each line.
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Very moving for its brevity....
It showcases talent when so few words
can speak so much. I especially felt
"Diametric emotions
beneath mother hen it sets for weeks"
What excellent metaphor and diametric
is poetry in itself. Blue
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amazing last lines!
this is a great write! i'm glad that i stopped by to read it...and am off to read more!
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awesome
that last line really brought it all together for me, this is def' my favorite
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Excellent Imagery
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oh dear I can relate to this one my heart is always smoking people do not want to see my flames keep doing well my friend love the rev papa
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Smooth
GREAT LINES
It sets for weeks our world's collide creating brilliant art,
A raging fire forms one complete heart.
WITHIN A PERFECT POEM. A MASTER PIECE
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I quite like the metaphors in this. I think it is a very well constructed piece of prose. The last too lines make the poem unforgettable. Great work.
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very good
my heart is always on fire
love the rev papa
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Excellent Flow
well penned - vivid imagery.
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Interesting
Beautiful use of the imagery to create a metaphor, i like the quick and direct nature of this poem. It creates an atmosphere that parallels the emotions it displays, while not comeing accross as Pretentious or over blown.
Very Well Done
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"Diametric emotions
beneath mother hen it sets for weeks"
Wow! I loved these lines! Beautiful work Anya!
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I like It... keep up the good work..
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AWW thanks for entering sis love it! thanks and good luck
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very nice. That's a sweet little piece.
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Awwwww
....And the winner is???? Great write sis!!
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you should write more, really
I'm cracking up, Anya. This time of year always does this to me. I put on a brave face but internally Iose it. Happy Christmas. -
verry nice... I like it.... JackReed....
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very well written anya :]]
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Great job, I read and I see that you get better with every effort. Merry Christmas
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Hmmm
Hi. It is nice seeing your work here. This is a powerful poem. I like the way you built up to the last verse. Keep writing.
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Hmmm that's really a nice one Anya I loved it. liked hese lines best:
"our world's collide creating brilliant art
A raging fire from one complete heart "
Anyways a good one Anya an have my usual
~~~~Good Luck~~~~
Anizeh
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This was a great poem! I liked how you subtly capitalized He "As sure as the sun will set He loves me" This was a Short but Sweet kind of poem! Keep up the good work!
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