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Perfect Hero

Ensiforms clash,
iron grates,
winds' sliced,
moments lag........
foes routed

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A hero takes on his foes.

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  • Ativyen Volst
    December 20, 2008

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    I must admit that I didn't get what you meant by "moments lag"

    But I do like ur use of the word "Ensiform"
    as it brings to mind an imagery that includes a large number of weapons as against if you had used the word sword.....


  • Lavender Butterfly silver member
    December 20, 2008
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    profoundly unique... x