17 Seconds to go. The sky begins to burn
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15
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13 Precious seconds. The oceans start to churn
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11 Seconds only. The air is filled with screams
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9 Seconds to live. The end of all our dreams
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7 Seconds and counting. Mountains start to crumble
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5 Single seconds. Beneath a deathly rumble
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3
2 More seconds. Blood adorns the sky
1 Final second. I whisper my goodbye.
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Author notes
Option 2
Quote:
" This is the way the world ends
This is the way the world ends
This is the way the world ends
Not with a bang but a whimper. "
-From "The Hollow Men" by T. S. Eliot
I'm not sure how this will look but I thought I'd try it.
A contest entry
- Soul Killers and Salt Pillars by Loki.
1650 points, ended January 3, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Hmm...interesting. Bonus points for original layout and the last two lines are killer. To be honest, I am not much for rhyme but in small doses, such as within this piece, it seems to work.
In any case, thank you for your entry and good luck in the contest! -
Wow this is jmust amazing! I love this format, sure keeps the reader on the edge of the seat! AS brilliant write and setout! And of course your wonderful rhymimg that I can never falter.
Best wishes in the contest!
Gaylene
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Wow!
This is one fantastic piece of work on Armageddon. Your format is a piece of art in itself. Never would I have thought to do a poem in this way. And the rhyming is meticulous. Your last line, "I whisper my goodbye," almost took my breath away. You have drawn us a picture of how the world will most likely be in the end days with such clarity. This is a job well done dear poet. I wish you the best in the contest. Your friend in Poetry, Mysty Rain
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