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K.i.s.s.e.s and [[Kerosine]]

K.i.s.s.e.s and [[kerosine.]]
make the world more .Obscene.

Living in a gas mask society

your P/o/i/s/o/n has              +.control.+

of me....

 

I'm (Losing..) myself

w.i.t.h.i.n your false _LIES_

I am d/R/o/W/n/I/n/G

in the words you last sighed

 

You are taking me DOwn

in a world full of PAIN & *hurt*

I am B

        U

           R

               N

                   I

                      N

                           G.

[inside] the -fire-

tasting your k

                   i

               s

            S

     e

  s

of Ash and D/i/r/t.

 

I aM but a .Tainted. Beauty in a room full of .Gas.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

option #5
this is my first ever try at dp style, idk how it will go lol. but I needed to branch out a bit.

A contest entry

please give me your honest opinion. I will return the favor a.s.a.p thanks.

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Comments

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  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    December 30, 2008

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    For your first go I'd say it's very good! I think this makes me think of some of the things I've gone through recently. Raw, love your word art, it's very prettyful :]


  • Andiness
    December 20, 2008

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    awesome!!! wow!!!

    And I thought I'd seen some amazing dirty pretties!! They have NOTHING on this...it just flowed so perfectly...and just WOW!!

    ---Thousand Petals


    • redhanded
      December 20, 2008
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      lol thanks for ur comment, it was my first ever try and the dp style so I didnt naw how it would work out. thanks so much for ur comment I truly appreciate it!


      andi
      (redhanded)


  • Ademon
    December 20, 2008

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    Wow, this is def. diferent than what you usually write love, but it's a good poem...the different color fonts and styles threw me off a moment when first looking at it, but reading it and seeing the picture prompt I think you did extremely well with this. There is a specific part that totally caught me and I thought was great!
    tasting your k

    i

    s

    S

    e

    s


    of Ash and D/i/r/t.



    I aM but a .Tainted. Beauty in a room full of .Gas


    nicely write sis!

    • redhanded
      December 20, 2008
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      thanks so much for your comment brudder I appreciate it! It was my first try at this syle so i didnt know if it was okay or not so thanks very much!

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