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hanging moon

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autumn eve' . . .
the hanging moon dallies
in a puddle
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  • Blushfulmoon silver member
    January 5
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    excellent~

    LOL
    TY for the smile...
    Hugs
    Susan~~~

  • Bruce silver member
    December 31, 2008

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    This is a nice one; the last line is very effective with great word choice. Sort of deflates the airy sentiments. Great job!

  • piccola silver member
    December 24, 2008

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    you are soo good at haiku (like I am any judge. lol) I like the aha moment which seems really difficult to accomplish. What's the secret? I read and read ... still, it is hard to do. You don't know this but you are the reason I met kirbysman. It's kind of a private joke but it is something I will always remember. Not a joke on you in any way just something that happened when I first joined AP ... anyway I always enjoy your haiku and am trying to learn from it. Thanks

    • haikumonk gold member
      December 25, 2008
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      Thanks so much..... and I didn't know that about you and kirbysman... that's so cool.... It's funny... but I thought you were kidding until I read the part you said "not a joke on in any way".... LOLLL Life is great, huh.....?..... and mysterious.


  • Andiness
    December 20, 2008
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    I love this...its almost liek its from a song


  • Lola Lola
    December 20, 2008

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    reminds me of being out on the ocean swordfishing. we go out at night, 20 miles out, and all you can see is the moon. beautiful!


  • catz Moderators member
    December 20, 2008

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    Your lovely haiku here is awesomely vivid. You've captured this moment beautifully.
    A dallying moon... perfect

    Dee


  • Catie Sheeran gold member
    December 20, 2008

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    I love the imagery in this...beautifully written


  • Bjarne gold member
    December 20, 2008

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    Oh Yes

    This past full moon was so magnificant across the Cove, unfortunately I was on the water without a camera. Oh well, the Mind's Eye is much more delicate than our electronic marvels.

    You have once again activated a point in time, so provocatively.

    b


    • haikumonk gold member
      December 20, 2008
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      Thanks so much. I watched it so intensely, I forgot to photograph it... and I'm a photographer... LOL


  • Mari Goes gold member
    December 20, 2008
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    I just love what you do with the moon in your haiku

  • Blushfulmoon silver member
    December 20, 2008

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    excellent~

    Love this sweetie
    I too love how you used the moon dallies
    Beautiful
    I just posted a new haiku as well
    Hope you drop by and see me
    Hugs
    Susan~~~


  • Venugopal gold member
    December 19, 2008
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    oh! what a wonderful way of saying 'dallies
    in a puddle' took my imagination

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