The Lusty Wench:
If living with family is what you need
then be prepared for much less nooky.
You'll hunger for the taste of seed
unless the parents always play hooky.
If you think this is what you want
consider the tale of two lovers bold.
To live rent free the two were wont
to give up sex in mom's household.
What? No sex at any given time?
No silly, none when mom's around.
The lovers knew and still their crime
was to forget the traitorous sounds.
So one night late they could not wait
for the silence once mom went to bed.
The sexual tension would not abate.
She really needed to give him head.
Urgently she grabbed his cock
and around it wrapped her anxious lips.
She sucked and licked and lost her frock
and offered him her writhing hips.
He took her hard, his pleasure to gain,
(this ultimately was her plan ...)
Those moans of joy, the gasps of pain
led mom to burst in. (Not the plan).
That orgasm was oh so close -
but now it flatly slumped and left.
The hands that got him so engrossed
dropped to conceal her dripping cleft.
Mom looked, she saw, she quickly turned.
Mom left the room, but she felt dread.
It seemed to her that she was burned
by evil lust, she wished lust was dead.
The mother:
The rules in-house were really clear
Sex is forbidden while I am here.
I thought they listened, or so it appeared.
or they wait for me to disappear.
Sometimes I leave and drive around
to give them time to hit the sack.
Nothing is sweeter than the sound
of sated laughter when I get back.
Imagine my shock when I heard moans
and thought she might have hurt her back.
I had to go and check those groans.
Instead I saw her heaving rack.
I saw her mouth, her hands, a cock.
I smelled arousal dripping down.
I felt betrayed, how rude the shock ...
the two of them had gone to town!
I think I'll leave, give them the chance
to blush and finish their lusty dance.
Author notes
So here it is - 50 lines from the perspective of two women .... one situation. Have fun.
A contest entry
- The Grand Champion Challenge 2 by Master Ktulu.
1400 points, ended December 22, 2008, 5 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The Erotic Challenge Season 9 by Master Ktulu.
550 points, ended February 9, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I thoroughly enjoyed this one! Great idea having it from the perspective of two women with one situation. And here all along Mom was leaving and driving around to give them ample time to have their fun.
You really have an amazing talent Beautiful! I'm in awe of the stories you weave within your poetry. I imagery and such really makes it a worthwhile read! Another hit from you!
Brava!
Lily♥
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How interesting!
How interesting indeed!
What a dramatic situation!
What a pleasant end:
I think I'll leave, give them the chance
to blush and finish their lusty dance.
Wet kisses all over, honey!
Gal2
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I enjoyed this the first time around and this time is no exception. Welcome back to the challenge
**Master Ktulu** -
This is original and well written and your ST is well deserved. Congratulations!
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Congratulations on the silver trophy. It's tough to do a rhyming poem on such a subject but you've captured the moment in all of its gleaming glory... big evil smile... lol.
Sincerely,
Leo Long
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rofl.... how many of us have had this incident happen. At least it wasn't Dad that came to check things out! hehehehehe... I truly enjoyed this piece and am looking forward to reading more.
spelling & grammar: 20... there were no errors on this count
Originality: 19... Not new but rather a new take on a known subject. Great job!
How well you handled the challenge: 19
Presentation: 19 .... you followed the rules to the letter, thank you very much. My point off comes from several places that stumbled in the flow of the poem. Different wording would fix this and make it a 100 point piece.
Overall effect: 20.... this was done with taste and tickled the funny bone, along with my sense of humor, quite well. Just what I needed to bring a smile to my lips and a chuckle to my heart.
Total: 97
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OMG~~
I Love this
Oh the humor had me laughing my head off
but adore the story and the message-
Yep I can so see the mother doing that-
just waiting around the bend- knowing it
may begin again
Excellent take on the prompt~
Woot!
I would have been quite flushed for sure
Thank You for sharing Your Humor and Voice~
Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
Best wishes in the contest too
with much love & light~ Desire~*~
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lol the embarrassment of being caught by mum... how close many of us have been to that one... i loved this piece... wish you all the best in the contest
cheers
Jen
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This is quite the story here, a very embarassing tale indeed. I think that there are some of us that have definately been able to relate to this and yes that is embarassing.
spelling and grammar=20
presentation=20
how well you handled the challenge=20
grab me=20
overall=20
Total=100
**Master Ktulu**
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while reading this i was thinking back to my first............ well never mind, but lol i can relate to this.
to write this from both points of view, i would never have thought of that and i am glad that you did. this really gave me a laugh.
spelling and grammar=20
presentation=20
how well you handled the challenge=2=
grab me=20
overall=20
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OWWW! I'm beginning to feel picked on here. This is another write I can personally relate to with painful memories. All I will say is I wasn't the mother. Oh my god!
The flow of your write is excellent, and the story well told, in both POV. I really like how you have shown the situation from the two opposing angles. It is truly a ghastly experience and a passion killer and you caught that brilliantly.
Presentation: 20
Spelling/grammar: 20
how well you handled the challenge: 20 another piece to test me, thank you
grab me: 19 based on readability
overall: 20
Total: 99
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Nicely Done
This would be VERY embarrassing indeed!!! I liked this piece but the rhyme seemed to change half way through it for a stanza, not sure why but it doesn't sound right!! To me clear and appeared doesn't rhyme together, but maybe thats just me!!! 
Anyways, well done and good luck in the contest.
Keep writing
Countrybabe
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