For all of you,
Who are in heaven,
Rest in peace.
You were never forgotten,
As many miss you so.
You brought me,
and many others,
Joy and peaceful serenity.
Never a dull moment
Could be found,
As long as you were around.
Your warm smiles,
Bright eyes,
And joyful laughter.
Your aura's were strong with love.
Never,
were you angry, or infuriated with us,
but you loved us all the same.
It seems,
That another year has come and gone.
We still smile, laugh, and cry,
with each powerful memory.
We hope that soon,
We can all join you,
And embrace each other once again.
Soon,
We will no longer cry,
No longer mourn.
Just embrace,
and love.
So, In loving memory,
Wait at the gates patiently,
Greet us warmly with,
"Welcome Home"
And know, We missed you greatly.
Author notes
I know the last part of the title doesn't make much sense to the poem, but in a sense it does. It is christmas time, and i've found that so many joyful relatives have past, and christmas isn't the same without them anymore. so to them, a final gift is a Christmas Prayer. i realize that you may feel guilty or timid in telling me if something is wrong to could be perfected, please tell me. I can handle the truth...
Thank you, Merry Christmas...
Jessica.
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Jess,
Christmas Day is the saddest day of the year for me, I won't place the weight of my world on your shoulders but felt I needed to explain that I relate to the beautiful thought of a Christmas Prayer for all of our loved ones no longer with us but waiting for us to join them.
I was getting tearful as I was reading and then spotted the word "furriated" instead of infuriated and it made me smile, despite getting tearful, not because it's a typo but because it was so endearingly natural, just as if you were saying this aloud.
Enough of my rambling
God Bless
Yvette
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beautiful, intricate words, yet simple meaning. well done.
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My dad passed 19 years ago on Nov. 14th and so seeing this at this time is a comfort, grips the heart and helps one to move on in a hope of reassurance. Excellent. Blessings.
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Your intentions are so good in writing this poem, but you should have used more time in putting it together a little better. Not bad but not your best.
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Exceptional write here
So true are your words and embrace to those past yet crdled gently in each of our heats and minds forever more .For when we give a gift of love and laughter it is a gift that never fades with time .
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In Christmas time is a sad time. You are happy in the now if you have family and if you don't you are nothing but tears and saddness. You wish they could be here. The pain feels like guilt and people do not know how to express this. I am glad you expressed it here. I think it is so pretty and sad. Thanks for writing this poem. and please when the season gets you down, just think "I can be happy for them, since happiness is contantous."
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very nice , very touching ... great job
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Actually, it seems quite nice as it is. In view of the entire piece as a whole, I'd say that the fourth stanza needs to most 'literal' revising. The first two lines seem a bit jumbled, although I understand what you were doing. Just read it aloud a few times, then see if there's another phrasing that makes sense?
And then, for the second half of the stanza, the word 'aurora' appears out of place. I would go with aura - not aurora - or perhaps something else?
Overall, it's a beautifully written poem. It's serene, but meaningful. If read correctly, I would imagine there would certainly be a few tears.
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could do with a bit more work
don't get me wrong, I think it's awesome, but some parts just seem to me as though its a little rushed. Its not something I can pinpoint to exactly, as in 'change line 2' etc, but for a memorial poem its a little short...
Please feel free to ignore me if that was your purpose the entire time, but in thanking someone for what they gave you while they were living, and remembering them for what they were seems to me to need a tad more than 5 stanzas. I do understand that you intended this as a group rememberance as opposed to an individual, but even so, it still seems a little rushed.
I don't know if that was any help or not, but keep writing! I still think it's awesome.
Cheers,
Aaliyah
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