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bi-poler they say

he has bi-poler i herd them say
confusion racing through my mind
his mood swings were noticable
but no-one quite had a clue

he's growing up
needs fresh air
something to get him interested
said hid dad

i'm worried this isn't normal
lets cart him to the doctor again
o dear they say
this reaction is bad

he fights the test's
i am ok
there isn't eny need for this
but he was wrong

they diognosed it as bi-poler today
its a relief and a shock to all
i'm fine he sez becoming a man
she cries for him not knowing what to do.

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um this is bout my mate who is only 14 who got diognosed with bi-poler today and it was really scary for as all to find out. his parents aren't coping, he is lost. i wish i new how to help him.

what do you think? it is rather crappy but any hints?

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