Momma I'm sorry
I don't want you to hate me
I couldn't go
it just hurt too much.
Momma I'm sorry.
Please don't hate me
I wish we could talk about this
instead you look away.
Momma I'm sorry.
Please don't give me that look again
I hate to see the pain in your eyes,
the distrust you feel.
I can't explain to you
why I didn't go.
I can't explain to you,
why these scars reside here.
I wish you would just talk to me.
Help me through my own tears.
Momma I'm sorry.
I've ruined your life.
I want to make you proud,
but it seems I can do nothing right.
Momma I'm sorry.
Is this what you wanted?
Momma I'm sorry.
My life has finally ended.
Author notes
"pink bunny" Age: 18
Alright, I wrote this poem because lately, my mom and I have been having a rough time together. Her mother passed away a year ago, but I didn't attend the funeral. I....I felt I didn't belong, and she was upset about it. She would barely talk to me for weeks after that, and still seems to prefer avoiding me. As well, i cut myself, and it upsets her. Everytime she sees the scars, she gets a look of disgust on her face, and won't talk to me. That's why I wrote this poem. I'm trying to get my feelings out, and hopefully this will work...
A contest entry
- Show me how deep you are! by Gold-feathers.
1200 points, ended January 24, 2009, 28 entries
Gold trophy winner
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Speaking as a Momma, if I read something like this, I might think my child was trying to blame me and make me feel guilty. That would be the ultimate revenge, wouldn’t it? Write something and not wait for an answer. Speaking as a commenter, I feel the pathos, the loss, the sense of hopelessness. Helplessness. It is just what X--SilverQuill—X asked for. You have obviously moved her. Me to. I’m thinking you got yourself a winner here.
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Thank you. I didn't want it to seem as though I was blaming her, but in a sense, she hasn't tried to talk to me. Instead she just looks away, and refuses to speak to me for a good few minutes. It hurts a lot.
But, thank you for the comment.
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I've read it again and again and I liked it dunno just touching and real I thought I would choose finalist later but I think I'll have to now and yeah thanx a lot for entering another three applause come. Good Luck lol
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Thanks a lot.
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Well I suppose this is something nice and well unique. Touching! but mothers can't stop loving and maybe your cutting hurts her and she thinks you don't care about her. That's hard to bear lol but I've been through a bit of such circumstances not as big as yours but a bit of it.
Nice peace of writing I really felt it. No rhyme but got a flow and your repitetion of "Momma I'm sorry"
Made it more empressive.
~~~~Good Luck~~~~
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