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Winter Tears

In the chilly evening air
i stood out in the snow
eyes cried frozen tears
my heart was hurting so,
i calmed all my shudders
with a gentle wrap of arms
and into the lonely night
i prayed again for calm,
as the wind blew harder
my bones began to chill
thoughts of that someone
my shivers remained still.



So silent was the frosty night
the stars were all set alight
yet i sighed and turned away,
to face another day
to face another fight.......

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  • deercatcher
    February 8

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    I think you were overwhelmed by the vulnerability. Too many things lined up in front of you... not enough help; not enough warmth and reassurance.

    Probably carrying a girl... to much estrogen for one body!
    (meant to be funny)


  • Puppydog gold member
    January 23

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    SO, SO SAD!!!!!!!!

    This is heartbreaking yet I can remember cold winter nights when my heart was aching and the hurt deep.


  • Lowell Poe
    January 22
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    poor boy..


  • Lowell Poe
    January 22

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    A cold night on many levels ..
    so sad ...yet there is momentary beauty in the mayhem of your soul.
    Still seeing the stars for their beauty shows you still have your day in the sun in your future.
    Descriptive and heartfelt.

    Beautiful lass,
    Lowell

  • A-muse-in-writer
    January 20
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    Awww

    This is sad and beautiful, such hardship evident and yet so full of imagery


  • shiratikva
    January 12
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    Beautifully written!
    I like it.
    well done


  • Melodies
    January 12

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    This is truly lovely, good poet! Well said, with tender imagery from your heart.


  • Sonja
    January 9

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    Came here to see who read my poetry and who left so nice comments and traces on my site. Asa I see, you have written such a nice poetry full of emotions. Great done
    ~Sonja~


  • 2lullabyhaven
    January 8
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    This is so touching, one can sense the emotional altitude in it


  • Crazy-Love
    December 20, 2008

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    I really liked this...A very good read. I'm not quite sure if its how I read it, but the flow wasn't as fluent, yet I still liked it a lot. My favorite part was the ending though, "So silent was the frosty night
    the stars were all set alight
    yet i sighed and turned away,
    to face another day
    to face another fight......."
    I personally did not care for the larger gap between the two parts, if it were perhaps smaller it would seem more connected, but not. If that makes any sense lol. Anyways keep up the good work, you have plenty of talent.


    • whitenoise
      December 20, 2008
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      thankyou for your comment i actually changed the ending it was
      to face another day
      another fight....
      but i was unsure thanks for reading abigail xx


  • Manda Kathryn Greeters member
    December 19, 2008
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    Welcome to AllPoetry

    Beautifully sad ~

    The sorrow expressed in this reaches beyond the page and touches my heart deeply; you have a talent for envoking emotions deep within as I read

    Wonderfully penned, though you may wish to Capitalize your I's

    ♥
    Enjoy AllPoetry
    Stay safe
    ~Manda
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