Oh, I am cold now
Soft flakes have gone all slushy
And my socks are wet
A contest entry
- snow haiku by piccola.
700 points, ended December 23, 2008, 47 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Haiku by Kathraina.
900 points, ended January 5, 42 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Humor, and or Nature Haiku by misticmoonlite.
665 points, ended January 14, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - JUST MAKE ME LAUGH, ALREADY blah...blah...blah... PW Welcome by echo-ink.
550 points, ended February 11, 53 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
All feedback appreciated!
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This acually made me laugh, yes...I am surprised, because when I saw a Haiku...I thought nah....but I'm either tired...
or this was histerical to me, and it had the shock factor.
hehehehehehehehehe
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Mission accomplished!
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I hate that! Iiving in Canada doesn't help either
nicely done.
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lol
what snow can do to ones body, i like the playfullness in this piece, thank you for this entry...good luck
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haha i dont like it when snow makes my socks slushy! feels weird *lolz* great job on this piece!!!!!!!!!!!!
♥ kathraina -
Very sweet poem with a child like feeling. I remember those days of cold wet socks. I would hang them over the heaters to warm and dry. Nicely done, friend.
Cheryl
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warmed by the fire
hung by the chimney with care
are my cold wet socks
very nice haiku thank you for entering -
Seems like you're complaining in this poem, but its really good for such a little poem.
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Thank you! I love jack-in-the-box endings, and the Haiku A-Ha moment is just the thing. On top of that is Haiku being not just about the words and situation, but all that the situation includes, implies, and suggests -- wonderful if you can do it right, eh? Happy to have touched you this way.
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Yep... read my poems too if you want
:-)
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What a wonderful haiku. You have given the sense of children playing in the snow without saying it. I remember those days and never wanting to come in, no matter how cold or wet I was. I loved winter then and I still love it now. Well done. Good luck in the contest. Your friend in Poetry, Mysty Rain
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Bingo! You saw it! Guess I'm on the right track here. Thank you!
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This is exactly what happens when you play in the snow. Cleverly done, good poet, most certainly!
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Sweet
and gives me goose bumps too
Good Luck in the Contest
Wind Walker
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You gave me a huge smile to start the day. That was wonderful.
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