My conscience rests easy knowing you
words spout from my subconscious
to hide safely behind your eyes
inside a mind that never speaks.
To what force do I pay homage,
for gracing me with your affection?
Pure, is the love I harbor inside this tomb
to an abysmal being that finds no light
the void is clear, yet, she remains ominous
forever impending doom upon herself.
What will bestill your restless heart?
Saccharine kisses are far too dreamy
selfishly begging eternal slumber
in fear of tainting a troubled heart.
What will convince your soul to endure?
Sorrow occupies her happiness
as she drifts into the distance.
How will I smile when you're so far?
Take a deep breath, and wait with me
as I ask one more thing...
What keeps your heart beating when it's dark ?
Author notes
I love you, Lilian 
that is all...♥
Tell me what you think
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A learned and experienced voice carrying the message of innocence in an eloquent fashion. Beauty in words at times reflect its source within, especially when like in this case the purity of human essence is preserved and used as a foundation to live from, to write about. I enjoyed being on this page to read and ponder. Thank you for creating and sharing. Take care.
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Such a beautiful write
A dedicated piece of poetry and how sweet are your thoughts
although there is dark
Best wishes and thank you
Julie -
Awwww isn't Lilly like the greatest muse ever? I tell her that all the time. Everytime I'm around her, the most beautiful words just flow right out of me
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Very Good
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wow i love it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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i like it
i found it hard to read but enjoyed it dispite the background -
This has to be one of the most beautiful poems I have read on here! It is absolutely wonderful and the imagery is perfect. In many ways this poem is quite flawless. I love it. Thank you for sharing...
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This has to be one of the most beautiful poems I have read on here! It is absolutely wonderful and the imagery is perfect. In many ways this poem is quite flawless. I love it. Thank you for sharing...
Ariel -
Wow... just.. wow. It's very hard to make me speechless. Congratulations. I'll come back to this later. The last line made my black little heart clench. Exquisite.
In awe,
~S.
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enod llew yllaer, uoy fo duorp, oot enod ylrevelc saw nwod kaerb rebmun senil ruoY.
em sdnuotsa tsuj egadrow eht dna, hsinif ot trats morf nwohs ssalc fo enO.
ereh eceip tnellecxe na nettirw evah uoy,,,rethguad !!! aohW
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I so loved every verse! Beatifully written sweetpea... and I love you too too too moonpie
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I really like the fact that the last line s a question. Poetry that ends in a question always leaves me wondering. I also love the lead up lines to the question.
This is a great piece of work.
Laura. -
Holy Shit!
Rena this is really on eof your best.
So affectionate and caring, and the you seem to paint a picture of love with your words.
I'm very impressed and I'm sure Lil loves it.
You've always had a way with words, but this time I must say, you've out done yourself.
very well done,
-Dustin-
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nothing less than beautiful
Beautiful Imagery, Great choice of wording, Amazing write. -
What a great dedication! I love the sincerity in this fine write. I can feel your emotions overflowing on this page. Great job.Keep up the great work!
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that was amazing, i love it
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Beautfiul! I truly could feel the pain behind these words.
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OMG
I love you!
I don't need to say anything else, cos I know you know. Only you know...
-rips heart out and gives it to you-
I know it'll stay beating this way
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"Pure is the love I harbor inside this tomb
to an abysmal being that finds no light", I used to try to force my heart upon such a soul.
Now it is I who has become the dark void.
Anyhell, nice dedication.
Not all mushy and ass kissing, but honest and empathetic.
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Dramatic, with pinches of the true thing we have gone through ourselves, and this is what it does, it pricks the conscience and reminds us that there are many in this position, of love frenzy, to which we have to close up shop, and suffer in silence, well done, here, it is nobly gracious.
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This was quite beautiful rena, every word that I read has truth towards it, I think this describes her quite well. I'm sure she'll love it if I know my sister.
NS
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Well Rena, not quite sure how to say this, but I rather liked it. A bit questioning, particularly the end.
*reads analyzing poetry for dummies*
Hmm...nice figuratives.
Loves you though.
Pat-E-Cake
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well Rena what can I say you have a very sweet nice heart and you penned this poem out of loving concern for your friend. its tough when you have such a friend going through hard times and you ar eunsure of what to do. in your case sounds like with this poem you are there for her when she needs someone to chat with and well care too so that helps alot and this poem will hopefully have the desired effect you're looking for. any ways a nice write Rena and keep up the good writes
Icy Cold Tiger
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