Ditch the ads, upload images and much more - upgrade today from 5.95/month!
Read Contests Groups Learn Forums Store Help
 

contrariwise .

i hate the world , it's secrets divine
your heart is pure , unlike mine
the windows break , glass falls to the floor
and i would sweep it under the door .

to the left of my chest , there's a heart that's beating
even though i'm blind and my hair is receeding
i live in an asylum , and my name is mary jane
i'm not hitting the target , so please fix my aim .

my eyes , aflame
from the secrets , from the pain
and to this day , we share the blame
for the monster i became

to the left of my chest , there's a heart that's beating
even though i'm blind and my hair is receeding
i live in an asylum , and my name is mary jane
i'm not hitting the target , so please fix my aim .

mary jane is a monster gal
she ate my soul , devoured it all
i don't know what i did to piss her off
but i won't ever do it again .

to the left of my chest , there's a heart that's beating
even though i'm blind and my hair is receeding
i live in an asylum , and my name is mary jane
i'm not hitting the target , so please fix my aim .

    : , Your review:

    Comment Suggestion: What is your your first impression?
    Line numbers  • Invite them to read
    : no Cost: 0 free left 0 points, You have (?)

Comments


  • Beverlynohime
    December 19, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    This is somehow reminding me of the book THROUGH THE LOOKING GLASS by Carroll Lewis!
    Beautifully written and nice Flow.
    Keep Up The Good Work.


  • Ti Amo Te Quiero
    December 18, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    Good job!! Like the flow and rhyme. But i feel the 5th stanza needs a little burshing up, otherwise, it was quite nice and all Keep writing ya. Cheers!!