I met a man
With gold for eyes
And hair as soft as silk
He danced with me
That one red night
Soaked in crimson dreams
He placed upon my tender soul
Two simple marks
Two burning needs
Poison to steal mortality
And with his words
Of kindest truth
The beast behind the man
I saw he was no man at all
But the beast inside
He bore two arrows
Sharp as knives
And pierced them through my heart
I left behind my other life
And plunged into this new one
Like a phoenix
Reborn from the ashes
I ,too
Was reborn
His man, this beast
His voice was sweet
But words bitter as a snake’s
I felt the want
The burning desire
To drink the pure red liquid
Of Sustenance
I felt ashamed
And pity for me
For it is I whom is the monster
I met another man
With eyes crimson as the life he drank
His wore the night
Upon his head
And stole the heart
Already stolen
The night became my sanctuary
The day became my dream
Surviving on the essence of others
Struggling inside
Two clashing animals
Fighting for morality
These men
But not the men of living
Swept me into bliss and chaos
I discovered ecstasy hidden inside
The tombs of others
The sweet, sweet source
Of my one thirst
Tore the other me
In two
I found a life
With these two men
Lusting, loving, caring, wanting
Drinking precious life
For mine
A sinner
A beast
I am
A vampire
A contest entry
- Vampires!!! Write Something on vampires PW by ShiningNShadows.
600 points, ended December 19, 2008, 41 entries
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Please tell me what you think
Comments
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um, soo...WOW!!
That was so cool. Me, I'm not so into vampires, but that was amazing.
I felt the emotions that were tearing at her. And your descriptions brought it all to life. The language was great, but not like those old poems that you learn at school and have to think about for hours to understand what the hell it's talking about.
Love the imagery! Like the phoenix etc.
The first verse hooked me straight away and it was my favourite. I also liked the 2 lines about the night and the day
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Well, I applaud you. haha
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Wow.... That was absolutely spectacular... We have studied a lot of poetry in our last year at high school, and I must say, yours at least rivals - if not betters - all the pieces I've read in the anthology. I love how you made it so you only discover what's happened at the very end, but you show us implicitly right at the beginning. The lines flow beautifully; the descriptions captivated me instantly, not too heavy, but enough to show what's happening; and the story line is beautiful at showing emotion. A wonderful piece of work all round
how I wish I could write my poetry like this 
. Brilliant analogies, and so many powerful clashing emotions. Amazing!!!!!
~Luck~
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this is a good poem!!! love the story finding two guys and living with them all of them vampires..very cool
"These men
But not the men of living
Swept me into bliss and chaos"
I can relate to this..but with only one man..ME CRAZY!!!!
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Nice job. Good luck and thanks for entering!
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