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The Easy Way Out..(My remedy)

                                              Pissed
                                    listen, dont speak
                                    The untold truths,
                                  The rumours leaked,
                          And evil thoughts consumed her.

                                  The house vibrates
                      As she swiddles through retrospect
                                    Her heart pulpitates


                          And she picks up the silver rose...

                          The road leading to her destiny,
                                                  rather her fate,
                        (Ent gon' be so great..)
                            narrow,
                          no doubt...Shes dry inside..
                          drought


                          And she takes it, opens it
                          And uses it

                          The silver rose,
                          Her, silver rose
                    Better she to succumb to it than others

                        Kate,Mikey,Robin,Kirsty,Michelle
                                          BURN!!
                                      in f***ing hell!!!

                          And with one kiss from her rose
                                        She froze.

                          And the weather changes
                                And it raining red,
                                      (f*** it)
                And she looks up at herself now reflected
            And her happiness is admonished and she lays down the bed
            ...dead

                                        Her only gain?
                            She eased her pain with pain..


Author notes

Kinda what i expected...

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  • miss keara
    December 18, 2008

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    Wow!!!

    This poem was CRAZY. In the good way, of course.
    I feel very glad none of those people are me, this is so passionate, with the element of pain and rage.
    It has such a serious tone in some parts, and it drastically changes to boiling over rage, then to a calm, decisive sorrow.
    This is nothing like I have read before, and I like it.
    Though it makes me curious to know what some of it means. In parenthesis, you have (Ent gon' be so great..). I didn't quite understand that, but
    Alas, this is not my poem, I am not expected to clearly understand all of it.
    Thanks very much for entering my contest ;D

    :Keara