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Still Doll

Lost in the shadow of your own sins,

you sit motionless.

 

No struggles...

No pain...

 

A slave to your loneliness,

a victim within.

 

Clouded thoughts crowd your mind,

filling the emptiness.

 

Burying memories...

Burying dreams...

 

Surrounded by your own destruction,

you have given in.

 

 

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  • Heroesrox
    December 24, 2008

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    Awesome write yet again. Your work never fails to amaze me...I liked it a lot! Good luck in the contest!


  • chilali
    December 21, 2008

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    A great take on the picture. Deep sadness in this piece but it is very beautiful. Superb! Good luck to you in the contest. This should do very well

    Love,
    Ylova


  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    December 19, 2008

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    Oh how well I can relate tio this piece! Just wonderful imagery here that made me wince in thought! Well done indeed.
    Best wishes in the contest.
    gaylene


  • Black Narcissus gold member
    December 19, 2008

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    Surrounded by your own destruction,
    you have given in.

    Wonderful way to finish such a sad poem.
    Lovely take on the prompt.

    Thankyou so much.