There was a young lady called Mercy
Who lived with a fellow called Percy
They sailed to Aeaea
Without any fear
And were changed into piggies by Circe
What did you think
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I think this is beautiful and very funny xd makes sense to me.
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Nice one, Keith. You have a definite flair for limericks and this one scans perfectly. The only slight criticism would be that the concluding line is not quite comical enough--it needs to be punchier.
Good luck,
Bill
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You're right, Bill, the ending lacks force. I've managed to find another rhyme for Mercy and have altered the verse to a more classical form. It's still no' awfy funny, but you can't have everything.
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Superb plus
This almost seems like a limerick. It is very well written, indeed. Thanks for sharing this one with us. -
No nothing sweet about her
Poor wee Percy. He probably didn't actually drown. More likely choked on a supermarket trolley Love your lines. xx debs xx
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