Thou art my light…
Thou does’t shine hope
on this darkened path
I doth walk…
Thy words
giveth me strength,
Thy smile wouldst be radiant
as a Summer’s morn…
Thy ruby lips as sweet
and intoxicating as a fine wine…
Such enticement
I doth behold in thee…
Such passion in thy heart
does’t stir
such longing in my soul…
To hold thee in my arms,
To gaze into thine eyes,
To kiss of thy lips,
Wouldst be to surrender
to my burning desires…
Fore I wouldst wish
to feel thee tremble
at my touch,
thy bare flesh
upon mine own,
hear thee gasp
as I doth explore thee,
tease thee,
taste of thee,
quake as I does’t
become one with thee…
To feel thy hot breath
upon my neck,
embraced of thy legs,
biting of thee,
glistening flesh
beneath my palm,
heart pounding as one
with mine own…
Such passions I wouldst wish
to bestow upon thee, my love…
I miss thee, so very much…
Author notes
May revise, not totally happy with it...
In a list
A contest entry
- Valentines day by trekkergirl.
400 points, ended January 26, 37 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Be My Valentine by AddictiveTRUTH.
3500 points, ended February 1, 12 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I held my breath reading this. Exquisite and brings on a daydream this night. To have that would bring a cloudy night sky a twinkle. You once again amaze me and make me wonder more. Excellence.
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Gorgeous
I think you did well with this. Thankyou for entering and good luck. -
reminds me of reading one of my old english classes. Sounds great. Just one thing that I need to mention that in the rules it asks for only left align works. Thanks for sharing it with us and thanks for entering it into my contest.
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yep it does do that ... romantically, sensually, and passionately..beautiful!
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Oh my! The vocab alone here is stunning! Such a passionate piece full of want and longing. And you have the best inspiration
Beautifully penned 
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Boy your art is amazing
The talents of Olde English and sensual love your words portray blew me away again.
Beautifully crafted and melded together to create a wonderful poem.
Best wishes always my friend
Julie x
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No matter how many times
I read this beautiful pieceapart from expressing my emotion
with a sigh,
I remain speechless.
~Pastel
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Hey Pastel,
Thank you for your kind words...
As always, you are my inspiration, my muse, the only one who can inspire such work from me... So thank you for being you...
Take care,
Fritz.........
X
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Aww.. so longing and raw sensuality in this. Wonderful write!
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I enjoyed this, loved the word choices, the feelings and images they stirred. Very passionate and sensual.
Good luck with this
~sugar~
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Wonderful use of classical vocabulary. Reads like a mournful Elizabethan minstral piece. Just bleeds emotion in a most powerful way. I think we can all share these feelings
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I miss her too
this is beautiful
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Absolutely lovely. Old fashioned love at its best. Beautifully flowing and sensual words that make you simmer as you think of a love you miss. Very well done, leave it just as it is. Sheila
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Romance and sensuality so poetically spoken...very nice. This is delectable!
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Lovely piece, kind of like something straight out of a naughty Romeo and Juliet!
The language is pure elegance and love, and the words are sensual and soft... a wonderful read indeed.
The passion brought across in this is breathtaking!
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i like this the way it is, you shouldn't revise it. The imagery and the flow is all very real. An intoxicating tale unravels here. with burning passions. so very amazing- "Fore I would’st wish
to feel thee tremble
at my touch,
thy bare flesh
upon mine own,
hear thee gasp
as I doth explore thee,
tease thee,
taste of thee,
quake as I does’t
become one with thee…" - as always fritz, i am envious.
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