"I was born in chicago in 1902"

Two people totally different
but still pulled together

A boy born in an other time

Dosen't fit in

But know on asks

Because they all seem strange

A family of outsider who never fit in

And then she comes

A girl so geeky and awkward you can't help but laugh

there pulled together by destiny

A love unheard of and of course forbiden

But Why???

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Quote edward cullen, Twilght. written by stephanie Meyer.

I reached 5 years, and forgot. by Beautiful Irony. 400 points, ended December 21, 2008, 13 entries
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Beautiful Irony
December 21, 2008

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I like it, but a few spelling/typing errors
Good quote to pick, given the current hype. I must confess that I've not seen the film, nor read the book, and so I may have missed some of the nuances, but I think I'm aware enough of the story to understand the poem.

As you've asked for constructive criticism, please don't be offended if I seem harsh, because I don't mean to be. There are a few spelling mistakes in this poem.
Line 3: "an other" is one word
Line 4: "doesn't"
Line 5: this line confuses me slightly. Did you mean "no-one"?
Line 6: "outsiders"
Line 10: "They're"
Line 11: "forbidden"
Once again, I'm not trying to be harsh or rude, because, overall, I like this poem. It works, it has good flow and a good description of the situation that you're illustrating.

This poem works. I like it. You've chosen a good form and, once again, it's a good piece of work.

Thank you for entering my contest, you chose a great and fitting quote.

Sarah
- Edwardlover
  December 27, 2008
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  this coment was VERY help =full i'll spellcheck thaks
- - Beautiful Irony
    December 27, 2008
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    Good, like I said, I was just trying to help . And, like I said, it's a great poem
Midnight Ghost
December 18, 2008
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Its a great poem with a great plot, but u should try using spellcheck.