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I sit,i wait!

I sit
I wait
I stair
my glance unfazed by time
or people
I wait for a time when i will be loved cherished once more

My clothes a simbol of my time

My hair

My fair

All symbol's my time,

of me

what's forgotten no loger loved as a toy

no longer a friend to confide in

first barbie

kicks my out my smooth porcleain hands breaking in her plasticy grip

like a choke hold on my future

Then evan the blond barbie queen was gone

ha

now she's sitting next to me!

New technologie every day

creeps in kicking a nother out

there all laying next to me

sad breaking with time

But I wait

I wait for my time to come again

 

Author notes

Thank you to: http://avril-images.net/, for the wonderful picture. and too : Alice in poetry land ,and Black Narcuiss for having this contest. Wich happen's too feuture a singer i love!!!!@!

A contest entry

What do you think she's waitting for... do you get the kind of dark ness to it????

    I plan to revise this poem: please leave constructive criticism!
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Comments


  • Black Narcissus gold member
    December 19, 2008

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    I really enjoyed the poem but I also found it hard to read.

    Kudos and brownie points for recognising the singer

    Thankyou so much for your entry.


  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    December 19, 2008
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    Interesting thought processes here, but I had to highlight this to read it so you may want to change the colour font or the background.
    I think you have written a fine piece here. Yes I get the darkness to this.
    Thank you for your entry and best wishes with this.
    Gaylene