I’m always being told
Of all the great things I learned
Which will help me, later in life
Like making coffee.
The only use of making coffee is getting a job,
The only use in getting a job is making money,
The only use for making money is for buying food;
And coffee.
A contest entry
- prewrites. by Melissa Gayle.
700 points, ended December 22, 2008, 23 entries
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1750 points, ended February 1, 87 entries
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Honorable mention
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Bronze trophy winner
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What did you think
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LOL, this was cute - congrats on the previous wins. I'm not a coffee person myself, but I know of many an addict who couldn't help but agree with you
thanks for entering!
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This is cute... so true. Yet cute. I liked to read it. Thanks for sharing this with us. You wrote it well. this flowed well.
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Interesting
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Excellent
A very fine write. You expressed your self quite well. Thanks for sharing this one with us. I also wrote a poem with this same title. A link in a moment, if you would care to read it.
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This poem has, at last, unravelled the secrets of the universe which was closely guarded by the Gnostics (or maybe not?) fine poem and I loved it a ton!
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So True
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Very good and very true. Reminds me of something a wise manager told me years ago. You need to decide whether you want to "work to live" or "live to work." The meaning behind this is what are your priorities, your job can consume you if you let it.
Keep writing.
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good
Being a coffee adidct since the age of two, I understand that coffee is , like bread and water, the staff of life. Enjoyed the write.
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Great
Nice job! I loved how you related getting a job to coffee. I really liked it overall because you started off with the only use for coffee and then ended with the only use for making money is buying coffee. It was really cute. I liked it and it was a really fun poem! Great Job!
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It is interesting that you mention coffee with getting a job some countries rely on coffee for their major revenue income your poem has a hint of this insight
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Very cute! I am a coffee addict, but those worse kind... an INSTANT coffee addict! lol So, yes.. this logic made perfect sense to me! Good job, nice a whimsical!
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This is a wonderful write. I lik the way your words go round and round about coffee. Wonderful flow of words.
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That's kinda funny. I like how it all just goes around and around.
This is really cute.
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cool poem but it seems a little unoriginal, the logic in it seems flawed and a bit half thought. thank you for entering and good luck
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I had to look at this one
I drink sooooo much coffee, you would think it a staple But you know, you are right Great job on this one!
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haha, this is cute. It reminds me of my brother. Coffee is his idol.
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I agree with nicole....really, i'm not just buttering up so i don't win!
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i chuckled, its good!
just a lil sugar please!
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Coffee? Got Milk
Got to have some cream with that coffee now I am old.
Nice poem, I think I like coffee.
Joe
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Coffee is good.
And how's bout insurance?
How about your car and rent?
Or would you rather,
all the wood you could gather...
and sleeping outside in a tent?
I like your poem alot. Just not too sure if a comma belongs between me & later.
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Very funny and original. Coffee does seem to be the start of everything.
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Good luck on all of your contests.This is so funny.I love the originality in this poem.Very creative and made me laugh.Great job.
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I love coffee! i like the reasoning coffee is wonderful lol I love it its a cute peace well writen it makes me smile
~GOOD LUCK~
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LoL
this is a very cute piece.
i loved your reasoning. the ending made me smile and even laugh a little.
i loved it
your Faerie
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I thought it was really amazing, mostly I like d the reasoning behing needing coffee.
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a coffee drinker are we? this is kinda funny because we tell my husband that he is coffee addicted..i've never seen someone drink so much coffee.. ha
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Because the piece is short, the repetition of 'the only use' because redundant.
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KAMACOFFEE
So so true a coffee users version of Kama , 1 sugar and taste of milk
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This is different. I love coffee. Rhank you for sharing. In Love & Light... Blessed Be! ~~Iridessa~~
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Bravo!
I Love
and this is a nice little poem!
Thanks for sharing, and welcome to AP!
-Timothy aka poeticweaver~
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Thanks for the comment, have a nice day
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Welcome to AllPoetry!
How true this cycle is. But you put into a very real perspective, that many will and can understand. For a shorter piece, this certainly says a lot about life.
Welcome to AP. If you have any questions or need help with anyting, feel free to IM me.
Keep expressing through wtiting.
Storm
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i really like this.
the entire adult world seems to revolve around coffee, so learning to make it is a very important skill indeed!! i like the way this poem kind of goes in a loop. it starts with coffee (title) and ends with coffee. and i especially like the last two lines of this - a fantastic ending!!
thank you, i truly ejoyed reading this.
ElectricBloom
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Thanks
Thanks so much, you made my day yesterday when I got this
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