Patiently she sits there, her radiance is seen
Casting euphoria around me I become wooed.
Capturing my very essence, she pierces my soul, I quiver...
Those deep, dark hues of blue, her eyes, I tremble.
Her skin fair as porcelain glass, smooth.
Flawlessly frail, she can see my heart breaking
Rushing forth in a sea of red I burst forth
Flames of passionate permissible lust take over
She’s bounded for eternity in
Red velvet dress, and red suede shoes
Author notes
Picture Prompt~ http://avril-images.net/
A contest entry
- Picture Prompt by Black Narcissus.
7000 points, ended December 20, 2008, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - the biggest prewrite contest ever by serenity silvermoon.
900 points, ended January 18, 362 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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this is flawlessly descriptive. such wording..amazing.. a definite winner. good luck in this contest. Jenn
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I love this write! you ran away with the prompt entirely. your descriptiveness is superb. keep up the good work
andi
(redhanded)
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Very powerful with descriptive imagery.
You added a lot of depth to a quite simple picture.
Many thanks for the entry.
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A lovely take on the picture. When I first started reading and saw each line enduing with a verb it caught my interest and I was thinking the whole piece would continue like this. It is very effective.
Best wishes in the contest.
Gaylene
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Nicely written My Young Sir...
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Why thank you sir!
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