I see you sitting there, face long and hands in your hair
eyes welling up and about to spill over.
Life just crashin' down all over you.
No end in sight, all alone through the night.
So I'll take your hand in mine
and brush the hair out of your eyes.
I'll kiss your cheek softly and whisper
"Smile for me."
If only for a moment,
pretend all the problems were nothing.
Pretend you weren't falling apart
and pretend there was one thing worth something.
Banish all the darkness from your thoughts
and let the sun shine through.
Set your weary heart at ease
and let love pour right in.
Even if its just for a moment
one solitary little moment.
Just please...
...Smile for me.
Author notes
For the one who has my heart.
For Carrie.
Please tell me what you think
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...Can't find good enough words.
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Very good
Even if its just for a moment
one solitary little moment.
Just please...
...Smile for me.
Nice ending to a very carring verse
Well said
I liked your quote from the Notebook
Perfect
Rick
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wow this was amazing
i love the way it says
"just smile for me"
that line makes this a masterpeace
you have done wonderful here
keep up the great work
love the shark
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wow
this is really something
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this was really nice...my first poem back and its one of ours, awsome dude. Your poetry has really grown over the years Iv been at AP...really. I like your wording and how you use details...smoothly written. I GOTTA PUT MY WORK ON SITE...IM FALLEN BEHIND !O! Well nice write...will read more!! Do believe.
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What a lucky young lady Carrie is! I am so lucky to know what I know! I love you both, and you are truly lucky to have Carrie in your life as she is to have you!
Great job on this one!
and love
Mommy
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Justin Dean Elliott, you are a born lover. It is one thing to say "I love you" to someone. To be honest, it is quite easy and it is used to freely in this modern day and age. Yet, even though you do not think this is one of your best, the love you have for Carrie leaked from the page. It is so beautiful, to see someone trying to do so much for another, and the only thing you wish for in return is a smile. It's a beautiful and rare thing. If only people could love each other like you and Carrie do, my god, I can only imagine how much more wonderful this world could be.
So yes, Justin, this may not be one of your best, but it IS one of the best love poems I have ever read. Oh, if only more men could have your heart, Thunder, there would be so much more hope on this earth.
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My Cheesepuff
It's stange.. The first time I read this, I cried. I was already upset and you wanted to cheer me up. I loved it. I really did.. .. but I think knowinging that you saw I couldn't hadle things in my life upset me more.. Made me feel weaker for some reason..
Then.. a few hours later, long after those tears had passed, I was thinking about it.. And I realized this is YOU. Not my family, not some of the people in my life who surrpound me, It's YOU. You wouldn't write something like that out of pity, or wanting to feel inferiour. You wrote it out of love.
So I came back, to read it again... and again and again. Everytime I read it, my smile got bigger and bigger, until eventually, I was crying. This time, tears not caused by self-pity and pain, but instead from knowing how lucky I am to have you.
Thanks so much for writing this all for me. I love you justin, more than words can say. And no matter the day, nor time, I will try and keep a smile on my face, just for you.
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I love it
its touching my heart
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This is the cutest, sweetest write. If somebody wrote that for me.. i'd probably cry just because it's so delicate, romantic, and beautiful. This poem just makes my heart melt, and it wasn't even written for me. So I'm sure your Carrie's heart.. well it must be beating for you. Beautiful write my friend!
-Faded
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AW!!! this is so cute!!! She is very very lucky to have you bro....^__^ im so glad you finally found happiness....and good luck you two.....and tell her that her new sister says "SMILE JUSTIN LOVES YOU!!!!!" lol....luv ya like a bro
~Cassandra
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I'm sure Carrie's heart melted when she read this cuz mine sure did! Beautiful. My ex fiance always use to say this to me "mylee, just smile and things'll be fine" funny...things weren't fine. Anyway, awesomeeeee write!
xxoo
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Justin this was really wonderful. She is a lucky girl to have such a great guy. The poem spoke so true. And I am sure she will smile for you Great work
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