I'm in charge of your pollution
Highfelutin' with a wicked stare
Welcome to the Devilution.
On the sides of my chaps "Evilution"
See motherfuckers, I just don't care
Cuz, I'm in charge of noise pollution.
The Surgeon General sees no solution
As the Church choir sings "No fair"
Welcome to the Devilution.
When Dear Darwin said "Evolution"?
I spun around with a smirk & said "Where?"
Cuz, I'm in charge of your pollution.
Like a radioactive yeast, I keep reproducing
With my Billy Idol lips & Gene Wilder hair
Welcome, to the Devilution.
The 666 layers of the Abyss? Mild in comparison
to the depths of this hole, and its hot scare
I'm in charge of the new pollution.
Welcome to the Devilution.
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Written February 9th, 2004
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I like the way this was composed and how easily it flows. Great job. I'm not a big fan on words like "Cuz" thouch. Great job though, I really enjoyed reading this.
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Clever wit and eleagnt form
LOL.
What a wickedly funny hoot this is. I dont think I've ever read a villanelle that read this smoothly in a long time. Particularly in light of the current fight in Cobb County Georgia to rid the schools of evolution as a scientific theory -- your multiple levels of play on the word and the evil that devilution is bringing forth is greatly needed and delightfully executed.
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I do love the villanelle style of poetry. You have done an excellent job with it on this one. This is truly an amazing poem. I thoroughly enjoyed this poem. Thanks for entering my contest, and good luck to you.
becca
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Very Good!
Another great vilanelle - this one a lot different to your others though which I found interesting. I like your outlook and issues written about here. Excellent work and thankyou again for entering the contest
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LMFAO @ Bohb's comment!! I was reading this for the form and the form is good. I am definately starting to be able to recognize a bit of what a Vilanelle should look like and read like. This form can really grow on you. Interesting topic you choice to put in this form. Goes to show this form is suitable for any type of write. Kudo's and Spuna and of course....
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i'm serious about singing some of this..it roars. maybe in stairway? i dunno. but don't let this get away.
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haha this is good
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Evolve Me
Hmmmmm....I've read the other comments and wonder briefly if I should just keep it to a low, noncommital "ooooh, cool", but decide what the hell. This is Devilution with a capital D and as such, should not be dismissed with a casual limp wristed wave of dismissal.
Nay! For can we look the snarling jackel in the face and casually wander off? Hah! Fight and laugh and scream in the howling face of Evolution - Science is my God and by God, I'll have you trussed and tied and delivered to the Devil in a split second of indecision. Sign here, initial here, here and here. You're done. You're good to go. Just don't slip in the mud as you crawl from the sea into the cold light of day. -
Pretty nice write
This is pretty cool. Keep up the great writes. -
Yes, indeed my loverly Spunostle, I did modernize the Vilanelle, and can do them left handed now at the races while enjoying a pipe. It lends to the reality of 'not all that seems complicated, is'.
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some of your coments are hilarious so this is a villane is it well i like it in your hands....red is great for passion... you seem to have modernised the villane so it was painless and i hardly noticed the formula
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i see you have some skill and talent, it shows in this piece, here i thought you were some pompas azz know it all, but you certainly have the potential, great write, thanks for sharing
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my my...i can see this as a rock song...but then again, maybe not.
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nice. i wasn't sure you could sing to vilanelle......you can i guess.
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You know, some pieces I know when the misspell's are on purpose and in others I know in which they are not. In this, they are on purpose, and it isn't like it is a hidding meaning really, they are there and they are blunt.
I wrote a similar piece like this once, whether just as good, I do not know.
A good piece that you've written here.
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