Watching the day dissolve silently into dusk,
millions of pretty jewels encrusted the
pink streaked sky.
As a gentle breeze breathed past
like a fine gauze covering,
wonderful feelings stirred.
That night twilight shared her secrets,
revealing the mysterious power of love
and how two apart can love so deeply.
Author notes
Wordbank
~ mysterious
~ twilight
~ pretty
~ dusk
~ wonderful
A contest entry
- Wordbank Quickie by letters to no one.
950 points, ended December 18, 2008, 11 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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"That night twilight shared her secrets,
revealing the mysterious power of love
and how two apart can love so deeply"
I think this is what placed you 3rd =]
Sorry for the delay in commenting, but I did say I'd get around to it, and what better time than when I'm home sick.
Thanks for entering this and giving me the opportunity to read it,
Shelly
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Thank you for the bronze and your lovely comment.
Valued and appreciated
~sugar~
Hope you are well soon
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This is beautiful hon. To me it sounds like you may be missing a certain someone. Twilight is a very beautiful part of the day, all the colours that streak the sky. Your descriptions in this amazing, I especially love this part
As a gentle breeze breathed past
like a fine gauze covering,
wonderful feelings stirred.
paints a very beautiful picture
congrats on the bronze, well deserved
All the best sug
Emma
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Sorry I missed this hon, thank you for your lovely comment
Valued and appreciate
~sugar~
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aww wow this is beautiful. just gorgeous, and i love the descriptions, your words made the imagery seem so intense and it was all very poewrful. keep penning, i love this write. congratz on the gold too, you deserve it
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Thank you for your lovely comment and stopping by to read
valued and appreciated.
~sugar~
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Pretty.
Very nicely written, sis. A lovely picture you painted here. Fine work.
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Thank you bro. Glad you enjoyed
~sugar~
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Stunning
Stunning writing. The words are very deep, and so true. Love always finds a way. The background is beautiful too. If this does not win a gold, or sliver, I will eat my hat. Very very beautiful Sugar.
Darkest Love
Wayne Leon
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Right baby, one hat coming up, I hope you are hungry LMAO
Thank you sweetheart for your lovely comment, it's a pleasure to have you visit
your constant support means so much to me, and is truly valued.
Darkest love
Chelle xxx
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Way to go, my loved one Michelle. I rather don't like wordbanks, I feel they are too restrictive, but your thoughts here seemed to flow freely and the imagery was magnificent.
I am feeling better now, I hope do be reading more of you soon.
Love, Brazos
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Aw B, sorry you haven't been well. I'm pleased to hear you are feeling better.
I like word banks when my muse takes a vacation..which this year, I think it must be taking a year out...apparently writers block has been a very popular destination LOL!!!
Thank you hon for your lovely comment, always a pleasure to have you read.
Valued and appreciated
Love ~sugar~
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WOW!
This is excellent hon I enjoyed this from you and good luck to you in the contest!
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Thank you hon
A pleasure to have you read, valued and appreciated
~sugar~
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omg sug i so loved it honey you so did a excellent job on the propmt good luck to you in the contest
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Thank you hon, always a pleasure to have you read
Who is the pic of??
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you would no if you keep up with your jewels goodness he is everything honey
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