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Shattered

Missing image

Alone
upon a stool,
surrounded by his shattered life.

A nameless village
in a disbanded land.
Torn asunder by brothers hands.

Souls scarred deeper
then the razed buildings,
remnants of a life.

Now scattered,
like cherry blossoms
after a spring rain.

When he was young,
the fields were ripe with wheat,
orchards and vineyards flourished.

 

Children laughed,

chickens, goats and dogs

roamed the streets.

 

Voices in his cafe
rang with laughter,
it was good.

 

Christian,Muslim,Jew

brothers, husbands, wives, children.

gone, never to return

 

So he sits,

in stunned wonder

for there is so little left.

 

This Christmas,

give the gift of peace,

love one another.

 

Namaste,

I open my heart .

Please, open yours..

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  • Swan song gold member
    January 15

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    Namaste,

    I open my heart .

    Please, open yours..

    I love that line esp after reading the previous lines


  • LittleMoon silver member
    January 1

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    I like your interpretation of this picture. He looks lost, bewildered and very alone as so many must do in war torn lands all over the world. Sheila


  • Hope Angel silver member
    December 31, 2008
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    Aw such a powerful message. Good luck in the contest


  • Swan song gold member
    December 30, 2008
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    The last stanza was simply clever and very beautful
    good luck I hope you win!!!!!!


  • sunoir
    December 20, 2008

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    good take on the prompt...too many people leave their lives behind...and some are just too old to start over...bravo


  • Meroza
    December 20, 2008

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    This is such a dark twist of this photo, and I am not sure I agree with your turn of this. But it is well expressed and a interesting chose of words.

    Best of luck

    • Draig aine gold member
      December 20, 2008

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      the picture

      took me back to Bosnia in 2001 walking through shattered villages, there a saw a scene like this many times and my heart bled, what was your take ion the pivcture

      • Meroza
        December 20, 2008
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        It was lighter, a homeless who's accepted its faith and adapted to the life. The man do look happy in the picture, there is no sorrow, just proof of life's many turns


        • Draig aine gold member
          December 20, 2008
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          then we agree to disagree, for I do see sorrow but more a pensiviness asking why


  • Fritz O skennick gold member
    December 18, 2008

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    Aww... Wonderful piece...

    Great sentiment & story telling within this compelling & heartwarming narrative that flows with grace & enthralls throughout...
    Keep up the good work...
    Well done!!!


    • Draig aine gold member
      December 18, 2008
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      thank you my friend

      I am happy to have found you

      Namaste

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