Time will tell itself in this hour.
All the clocks are losing motion.
Cunning words and thoughts are my power.
No vacant space left for emotion.
Tonight I help you write your suicide note.
Making sure they never find it.
The words I say boil from your throat.
My birth and your end will always meet.
You've come quite far, it enlightens me
Seeing how much you're about to lose.
All of you're pride and dignity
Fade as I tighten the noose.
Seconds start to feel like hours now.
Welcome to your agonising nightmare.
In suffering, to me you will bow
As I torment you, laugh and stare.
Are you feeling hopeless, inadequate or scared?
Then let's elevate the misery to a new height.
I find you pathetic, defeated, ensnared.
Amuse me and try putting up a fight.
By choice you convert the obvious into subliminal.
What hurts the most, is that which is true.
Your crimes have caught up to their criminal.
I am your enemy, yet I am you.
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wow. you have such a nacht for writing. these words are powerful. definately one of my favs
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Thanks man
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wow. that was so.....utterly amazing. I have to agree with all of the comments. Brilliant, one of the best....
Write on.
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woo-that was brilliant! really good-fun twist! j'adore ca! that is so good!
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ha ha
Baie dankie Verlore-Engel
Thank you very much Lost-Angel
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no problem it is great
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MIND BLOWING!
Okay,I think this has to be THE BEST poem I have ever read!You're so introspective in this write....
Which I like very much being that it gives me the strong impression that you are indeed an intelligent person with depth to your soul,love and a conscience in that heart of yours,and a will to face your previous evil side and show it the huge difference from what it is and what it wishes to be!
I love how you distanced yourself from your own mind,body,and soul in the beginning but you left hints that you were writting this to yourself.That is what the Buddhist and Hindu beliefs I love teach.... to separate one from one's self to gain a different perspective.I often write to myself in my poems and songs too!Very well done!
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Thank you Haunted.
The best poem you've ever read? Doubtful but thank you very much!
You have a good sense of judgement because you analyze the flow of poetry.
Take care,
Francois
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We, humans, are prone to introspection. In the process we learn to find much of ourselves wanting or evil. Yet it is the mixture of the good and bad that allow us to create and be sensitive to others. ("There, but for the grace of God, go I")
You have used a very interesting vision and paradigmn to create a high court of self correction. Saddly, once sentence has been passed you are left with you. Or perhaps to create a sense of joy where once had been rivers of sorrow will allow you to see the negative you is only prominent when you choose.
Peace & Light,
Tom B.
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I understand what you mean when you say that unfortunately we are always going to be left with ourselves being our own worst enemies. It does sound as if the poem is directed towards a "once off" confrontation with him and himself. Yet, did you read carefully?
"My birth and your end will always meet."
Thank you for understanding the poem and your comments.
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