Fairy white flesh
And wild raven hair,
His beauty was one
With which none
Could compare.
We danced in the forest
And we danced in the glen
And maybe in death we will dance once again.
I called him my cherub,
Though "devlish" said some.
But would they have said this
If they knew what would come?
You see we danced in the forest
And we danced in the glen,
But here on this earth, we will not dance again.
Porcelain skin
And long ebon hair,
Her beauty was one
With which none
Could compare.
We danced in the forest
And we danced in the glen
And maybe in death we will dance once again.
I called her my angel
Though "witch-child" said some,
But would they have said this
If they knew what would come?
You see we danced in the forest
And we danced in the glen,
But there on that earth, we can not dance again.
We danced in the forest
And we danced in the glen
And maybe in death we will dance once again.
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And I actually like the title.
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Amazing. Left me breathless. How did I miss such an incredible write?! Simple words do little justice and even clappy men are a weak reward. You astound me, dear friend!
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Excellent
A very fine write, indeed. You have expressed yourself quite well. Thanks for sharing this one with us. -
In the world of fake tans and bleached hair, that's a welcome take on beauty. Great stuff.
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Great! Exceptional as allways, another minor masterpiece... loved it!
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wow i like this one. i enjoy how it had the point of view of both the girl and the guy.
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Great poem, good use of rhyme, i enjoyed reading it
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Great - has rhythm & rhyme...
Great lyrics, poem would make a wonderful song, hope your'e working on some music for it! Only thing is, the title needs to be more original. Something other than "A Love Song." Thanks!
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I know, you are right. I'm working on that. I didn't want to post it as "Untitled" though.
I do have a tune for it, it's just a matter of getting it written down and eventually recording.
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GREAT WRITE!!! I loved it.. you did a great job!! Keep up the amazing work and good luck in my contest!
Shannon*Leah
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