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The Sky

White speckled
Cloud covered sky
Like a blue painting covered with fluffy cotton balls
In an artist's workshop.

What are your favorite lines? What needs revision?

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  • Ana-Andrea
    March 13

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    Charming! I liked your metaphors - they paint a picture, and such a sweet, "summer-y" one! Lovely little piece. Great to read your stuff again.


  • Slick99
    December 29, 2008

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    the sky

    this is awesome!! i like the lines "white speckled" and "like a blue painting covered with fluffy cotton balls" thanks for sharing, -Slick