light;
anti-misery in liquid form keeps the pain away
only for two hours a bottle.
the shades are drawn
and the doors are closed,
trying to create darkness
only hurts the soul more.
dark;
eyes shut tightly
to escape the day.
even moonlight brings back
the skeletons from the past.
Author notes
prompt: eclipse
50 words.
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mesmerized--x
Amaranthine Lover
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A contest entry
- Best Prewrites From December 2008 by amaranthine lover.
1605 points, ended January 10, 21 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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beautiful. just simply beautiful.
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this reminds me of twilight
i can't tell if its because of the eclipse thing
or b/c of the poem itself
but it does.
trying to create darkness
only hurts the soul more.
so poignant and so true. -
bah
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I loved this, your take on the prompt was brilliant. This was extremely well written and I just loved it! Thank you for entering and good luck!
Take care
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WOW! Gold perhaps?! Uh-huh *nods head* A wonderful piece love. Well done!! I usually wish people luck, but haha, you do not need it. Oh well, all the best to you anyway
Much love,
Ylova
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"anti-misery in liquid form keeps the pain away
only for two hours a bottle."
XD
Awesome
I love this so much
Shelly
x
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WOW. You are good at writing generally, but this one was especially powerful to me for some reason! I liked it a lot. great job & good luck in the contest you entered.
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