Seventeen and we fit this scene
Dancing in the nightclubs
And we will be together soon
You come in the room with nothing but a smile on
I love you and it wont be long
Your the one that makes me wonder about september
the time and day that we wished we could sleep
In the grass for hours and hours at a time
Come hold me close
Just like the roses you got on Valentines day
We wont be this way forever
No we can stay this way if you want
I have nothing to complain about
Your lips on my face
Are all I need to live in this place I call home
Your in my heart and in my mind
We can have fun all the time if you want to
But we can not fall through the floor
Baby we can always see the world
When we are 21 or so
Dancing in the clubs got you to notice me
Now we can be together and never be apart
Seventeen you'll be soon enough for the world
And you know that your always gonna be my girl.
A contest entry
- Even fairytale characters would be jealous .... by Page Deleted..
400 points, ended December 25, 2008, 6 entries
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This took me back.
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This made such an awesome picture in my head.
XD
I just keep reading it over, and over.
Reallllllly awesome.
good write.
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THIS POEM IS ABOUT ME ME ME ME ME!
i'ma princess.. and you gots the skillz and the girl.
ahahahahah!
and how does it sound like seventeen forever?
how lame. colin's words are way better than metro station times 567654167984545101. yeah man. -
This poem is brilliant! Kind of sad and inspirational at the same time. It makes me think of that Metro Station song "Seventeen Forever"
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*sigh*
When I was 16/17 - they opened up a dance club in my little town for the under 21 age crowd. It was awesome. I was such a shy girl in school - but on the dance floor where I felt I could be myself (and it helped that I didnt have to talk - the music was too loud and so I could get away with just smiling and nodding!) I connected with alot of people and found a few "crushes" and what I thought was my "first love" - he wasnt of course - not once I found out what love really felt like - but Ill never forget him and Id never have met him if he hadnt noticed me on the dance floor
This is a great poem and thank you for taking me back in time for a little bit
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This is a lovely piece that you have written here. It made me think of my first true love. Good luck in the contest. Below I am showing you a few mistakes with your spelling. I hope this does not offend you. Sometimes on AP the spell check does not work.
"Just like he roses you got on Valentimes day"
"he" I think you meant the & "Valentimes" is Valentines!
"Danceing in the clubs got you to notice me"
"Danceing" is spelled Dancing!
In Love & Light... Blessed Be! ~~Iridessa~~
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