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The Unbeliever

What is heaven?  Can we believe?
When we are there it will relieve
Will it help our lives refine
To know the end is so sublime?

Or will it always be a swaying
Unknowing thoughts, unconveying
All our hopes and dreams delaying
Because our minds such games are playing
And emotions are displaying
Endless feelings all affraying
Undecided and concealing
Unexplained unrevealing
All is lost and not appealing
Bitterness is all we’re feeling
And hopelessness is all revealing

Oh God! Can it last?
All this guilt from the past
Will happiness descend at last?
Or will it haunt us till the last
I hope this is not so
I know that he is not my foe
Or do I?

I would not speak his name in vein
Though unconvinced I still remain
Not quite sure of how I feel
Of Gods existence. Is it real?

I would dearly love to know
That I could trust believe it so
But all my logic tells me “no”

How can one person have such might?
When all around can lose the fight
And all at some time take such flight
With only doubt and fear in sight
Seeing darkness never light

If peacefulness can be achieved
Then maybe I will be received
As being good though unbelieving
But innocent of crimes and scheming
But if doubtfulness a sin can be
Then I am sure it’s hell for me

Jenny Lloyd

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  • Corinthians13-4
    May 8

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    Well, I must say this isn't what I expected, but it's very very well written. It actually sounds like a combination of some things that came up in the classroom when we were first starting the year preparing for Confirmation, and the moments of doubt that you've got to bridge in order to get "On a God High". I don't really know what to think about this poem because it is a little out there from what I was asking for, but it's so so good that I can't bring myself to delete it. Good good good. Excellent job. I really really like this (although in the second to last stanza, second line "loose" should be "lose" I think )
    Thank you for entering!!

    <3 Erin


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    April 24

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    i am not in the best of moods so am reading the entries in this contest to feel better. thank you for helping me. good luck in this contest. viyanna rosemarie

  • judmc
    April 24

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    Well Done

    A nice well written doubters poem excellent rhyming sceme good imagery had it been a "pro God" poem you would have walked it.Best Wishes...George...


  • Mizzundaztood gold member
    December 19, 2008
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    this is pretty good, I do however think you over did it with the rhyming.