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Alive Below

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O' beneath these tangled roots, worms
m'soul shivers in grit, grim
Clawing nails digging; despair cursing
escape anticipating time
Demons of darkness soaring high
forming clouds so black
Within m'womb kicks thy babe; tis
m' skull ye cracked
Alive below nay more in flesh under
life's knoted, crooked tree
Out of the bowels of Hades m' family
flies vile after thee
Anon beside thy body buried perfect
breathing damp, un-free
Welcome to leafless Shady Rest's ugly
twisted wicked tree
Alas thou hast come home, m' darling
united again means we

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credit: found on deviantart: untiteled_in_dark_by_alexka

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  • fortyninereasons
    December 21, 2008
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    thank you for your entry. Good luck in the contest.
    Juls


  • Pete Greenslade gold member
    December 19, 2008
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    i agree with the other guys miss nough said,, good luck


  • Swangrnv gold member
    December 18, 2008

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    wow, such a..

    good creepy feel to this! l.o.l. as long as it's make believei love being scared! great imagery, with that 'only you' style that i'm really starting to truly love.. ' m friend!! '


  • Abson
    December 18, 2008
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    THE DARK WORLD BELOW..

    A very picturesque description of live beyond the veil of the shadowed world ;the land of no return.The images here are scary but intuitively reflective of the law of sowing and reaping in life and in relationships between a man and his wife.You did a fantastic job in driving home your message through the use of these poetic embellishments.WELL DONE!!!.


  • Brazos silver member
    December 18, 2008

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    Quite the dark spell this one casts, "
    Alive below nay more in flesh under
    life's knoted, crooked tree". Her lover killed her, perhaps knowing or unknowing on her condition.
    Aha, but fate has cast them together again in the pyres of Hell, where he will receive no pity.

    Wonderfully and darkly penned Dove, your write left me with a chill in my bones. Well done.

    I love you,
    Brazos


    • ennovy silver member
      December 18, 2008
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      Brazos my dear

      Wow! you got the whole concept; a perfect understanding of my words and No he didn't know she was with child....If he did he would of waited...and done away with her later....Glad it chill your bones........I love you too.......Novy

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