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[ Joyful carols sung ]

Joyful carols sung
Sudden burst of red and green -
Christmas time is here

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This was an ok haiku for me but it was fun writing! Merry Christmas!!

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  • Mari Goes gold member
    December 18, 2008

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    The carols, when they sing well is a indeed a joy
    Nice image you have here. Maybe should keep the verb sing in the present tense, which wouldn't change the meaning of your poem but make a better haiku of it, for haiku is usually written in the present tense.
    Syllables don't matter that much, the best is to have L1 and L3 little shorter than L2, 17 syllables or less, but there is no rule for a strict format of syllables counting, unless you suing a specific technique.
    Thanks and I wish you a very joyful Christmas

  • avatar1957
    December 17, 2008

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    Festive!!!!!

    haiku are 5-7-5 or 3-7-3
    Iam myself just beginning to learn this kind of poetry. i thought you did a wonderful job
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