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Tin of Memories

In my room sits a tin,
old popcorn tin actually.
Inside are memories that have
sat closed up for years.
Inside are the final moments
of your life.
Inside are the precious things
that remind me of you, Dad.
Your Husker sunglasses and your
favorite shirt.
I open the tin and the aroma that
spills out is of your cologne.
In this old popcorn tin,
lies the last moments of you.
Inside are the irreplaceable memories
of you.

Author notes

My words for this would be old, tin, popcorn, irreplaceable, memories, dad, precious, cologne, sunglasses, shirt. This is seriously an old popcorn tin filled with pictures, his fave shirt and half a bottle of his cologne. It has the guest book, flowers and cards from his funeral are all in there. So it is my Tin of Memories.

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Comments


  • Ademon
    January 14
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    Congrats on the Golden SHINY!!!


  • HugsForEveryone
    December 17, 2008

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    Ohhhh my goshhh, I am soooooo sorry about your dad.
    I don't know what I would do without mine.
    You must be very strong.
    This was a wonderful poem, it just brought me on your little adventure of memories.
    Thank you for entering this in my contest
    ~Rose


    • Quinsmom
      December 28, 2008
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      I am sorry i havent been on i a while. Thank you for picking my piece as the top!


  • redhanded
    December 17, 2008

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    aww this is soo sad. I love this piece! the flow is great and I can feel you sadness and yet some hope within this little box of memories! great job well pen'd my friend. best of luck in the contest.
    andi
    (redhanded)