close my eyes and there you are
glare of the sun reflecting off of your smiling eyes
soft brown hair flowing freely in the wind
gentle smile makes me fall to my knees
nights spent lying together
under the unknown night sky
naming the stars
making wishes at those fallen
wispering in your ear
reasons for my happiness
all begin with you
days spent thinking
of how to be better
better for you
because i did not deserve
to hold you in my arms
call you my own
dollars spent carelessly
money meant nothing when it was for you
diamond necklace for christmas
dozen roses for no reason at all
delivered to your class by my own hand
the look of your face was unforgettable
worth every penny
phone calls spent listening
the soft sound of your sleeping breath
always there incase of a stir
a bad dream
always there to reassure
words spent arguing
broken tears held back
one single night
to ruin it all
hours spent... with him
messages ignored... from me
told by your mother
you were with him
light to light
patience spent foolishly
waiting for your call
an explanation
to ease my mind
love spent wasted
in one single night
you ruined it all
all i could give
anything for you
all you could take
everything in me
Author notes
thats what you get when you let your heart win
A contest entry
- Promised Forever by Megan Awesome.
750 points, ended January 18, 43 entries
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its soooo good!=)
I love this so much. This is like one of the love poems of the century. Its so sweet and then the end is bitter. Its amazing.i loved the words you used. You didnt use anything cheap. It just so good. Its one of those poems that pulls at your heart when you read it!
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Wow, this is like... this is amazing.. I mean I seriously can't put into words how amazing this is. I really love this poem. Just... everything about it...
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at the begining of the poem i was like, i so want a guy whos going to be there for me like that. but ive been through heartbreak so i know how it feels. your a great writer. keep it up.
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Oh have I been there. Beautiful poem, I like it's simplicity and uneven flow. It seems really honest, which is what I need right now. Thank you.
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aww jake...this was so sweet!! i loved the emotion and it was so hearfelt. i could picture this in my head. how the heart wants what it can't have. all in all a great poem. keep it up! this took my breath away!
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Oh wow! I've been cheated on as well. It doesn't feel good. I'm sorry that this happened to you. I know how it feels to care about someone so much you would do anything for him/her. Just makes it hurt that much more when you lost that person. Thank you for entering my contest and good luck!!!
Megan -
This is pretty sad. I have to be honest the flow is a tad bit forced, the overall emotion in the poem is very well conveyed.
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thanks =] i was tryin to give it a kind of umm, rough flow? lol if that makes sense. i wanted it to be kinda choppy i guess
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