Ditch the ads, upload images and much more - upgrade today from 5.95/month!
Read • Contests • Groups • Learn • Forums • Store • Help
 

Precipice of Beliefs

i stand upon the precipice
of all i came to believe
i look into the distance
and im appalled at what i see
there are no silver linings
the clouds are all bare
no tall glasses of lemonade
just lemons laid without care
the grass is not greener
in fact there is no grass
so i turn to leave
go back the way i came
and i see you standing there
as if awaiting my decision
so i come to you
i run to you
and i put all my beliefs
in you

Please tell me what you think

    : , Your review:

    Comment Suggestion: What is your your first impression?
    • Line numbers  • Invite them to read
    : no Cost: 0 free left 0 points, You have (?)

Comments

1 - 8 of 8

  • BloodWhiteOleander
    May 8
    Edit | Reply
    you never scease to amaze me.


  • Myjoy gold member
    February 11

    Edit | Reply
    This is lovely, how I wish it worked that way for all....I would not be in the tears I am these days. Thanks for hope.


    • tombruize
      February 11
      Edit | Reply

      Thanks

      You are so very welcome. I pray that sliver of hope helps to eradicate the tears.


  • poetryality silver member
    February 3

    Edit | Reply
    The sense of being in spite of what anyone believes sings to me from these lyrical words. It is a grand thing to have something and someone to believe in. The best person to believe in is YOU! Great work poet!


    Much Love & Respect ♥

    Renee


    • tombruize
      February 11
      Edit | Reply

      Thank you

      I agree... to believe in oneself is monumental.


  • Patpowers silver member
    December 28, 2008
    Edit | Reply
    Nice work Tom! I wish I could have some of that lemonade! You did a super job on this! THANKS!!


    • tombruize
      February 11
      Edit | Reply

      Thanks

      Pat I appreciate your kind comments... Have all the lemonade you like.

1 - 8 of 8