♦
that sugarsweet voice that
i remember is gone, and
with it your ability to charm
droplets of resistance from
the melody of my distress
you say that the fault is mine -
that i didn't appreciate
anything you never did
and i smiled at your mistake
realising it for what it was,
a symptom of a disease greater
than you, me, or the imaginary
relationship we clung to
so desperately
the light of realisation clicked
on, i screwed my eyes shut, and
performed the surgery needed to
remove you from my identity
i am no doctor,
and my lack of precision
has ensured scar tissue
but my hands are young, and
i'll harness vaguely remembered
agility in my attempt to
weave a new life, outside you
♦
Author notes
Note: the title is not spelled wrong, it is a play on words.
Author: Maylette
My six words:
appreciate
click
imaginary
droplet
weave
melody
A contest entry
- 6 words I'll send to you and then you give me something wonderful! by Nakatrea.
625 points, ended December 29, 2008, 15 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Thank you for reading & commenting
Comments
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nice!
Really really nice! Especially using someone else's words.
Keep playing with words.
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..WOW Definitely a great take on the prompt. I should have more of these contests more often... hmm anywho - the play on words is great. This is such a great poem. -happy noises- I'm so impressed. the descriptions are fabulous and clever. I really don't have much to say except the lack of capitalization actually works here.. super creative and awesome- absolutely loved it-
good luck
Kat
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hmmm what to give you what to give you....
well...lets see here
lets go with
appreciate
click
imaginary
droplet
weave
melody
(words dont' have to be in that order)
have fun!
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