Scorching words laid upon one who is seething,
sounds that emerge cacophonous...
warped in a chaotic manner,
a sweet melody,
echoes everywhere,
yet nowhere...
lulls one into feeling secure,
is silent for a time,
'til overconfidence proves one's undoing,
trapped forever in the foulness of reality,
where one cannot ignore,
anything.
Succumb to madness,
suffer forever,
desolate land where one shall never attain ataraxia,
if one conquers all that besets one,
what will it be worth,
this Pyrrhic victory?
Thrawn
Author notes
Was inspired to write this as the result of the overcoming writers block class....this poem represents my determination to conquer the apathy rooted in my soul...
A contest entry
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400 points, ended February 22, 2009, 42 entries
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i like this alot. itts different. and i had to go and look up the word ataraxia in the dictionary. lol.
the only thing i think needs work here is the structure. the piece needs to be broken into stanzas, and needs some punctuation, otherwise its literally one run on sentence composed as a poem.
this piece has makor potential -
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i very much liked this poem. i like the words used and the flow of it. very nice and continue writing :]
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Very good write you have here.Its dark and I'm all about darkness.Written beautifully and I hope it helped with your writers block
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wonderful! yes dark but i know the writing style, simply for the fact that is how i write, but other than that it is really great!
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Kudos
Had to take the dictionary out *very slow*... but overall amazing. Even learning about Pyrrhic Victory was interesting. Lovely write and interesting how it ended that it would be a pyrrhic victory; has me thinking.
Kudos.
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