1st attempt
flashing
a falling star lights
the hill
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2nd one
flashing
a falling star fades
the moon
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3rd one
dripping
the night sound
of a faucet
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4th one
dripping
in the night
a faucet
Author notes
My last assignment to haikumonk's advanced haiku class.
I finally graduated with this one, after few attempts.
The technique used was GENERAL TO SPECIFIC.
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Ethereal
As always, but probably old hat for you by now
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Great
I like this one, and its evolution,
very good.
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You can write in any style and form - that I know, Mari - and these haikus are gorgeous. Wondeful continuity here!
Voorspoedige Nuwe Jaar, liewe vriendin!
~ Nicolette
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Great job Mari!!!
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Thank you for all the help since I started writing haiku, you are a great teacher, haijin and friend
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bonita!
Mari your brilliance as usually is so well reflected in these haiku wishing you a warm xmas and a brilliant new year ahaed
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I guess I'm just a fan, with no direction. I like them all. And I love the idea of Ms Goes being an Advanced Graduate. Sounds almost ‘tall poppy' something to hold on to. (Thank you).
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I can almost hear it drip...interesting how this has transformed, yet I can see how it relates back to the original...haven't wrote haiku in quite awhile...you've inspired me to do so. Lovely penning
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"...fades the moon..."
Now that's intensity,
a brilliant flashing!
M-C
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these are lovely and so identifiable... congrats on graduating your class
well done!
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"flashing
a falling star fades
the moon"
i love this Mari, i need to join one of these haiku classes, i love them, maybe in the new year..lol.
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haiku is still a missing part of my poetry but i enjoy reading it when it is well done...a very strong exercise here... the end results show the efforts and the progress ...Congratulations... PK
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And let's not forget
A dripping faucet
keeps time with a flicking
shooting star...
Hugs...Eddy
Things are looking up...it's gone from 41F below to 24F below now
I wonder if that qualifies as a heat snap... lol
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qualifies as brrr
with that temperature a faucet will not drip
can't send you sunshine today, we are having very cloudy days here. Will send you a hug instead
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dripping
in the night
me
Umm, that might mean what I don't want it to mean...well, yes I do.
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there is a thing we call nachtpot here
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dripping
in the night
my nose
Congratulations on becoming a High Priestess of haiku!
Now on to the next class, isn't there a masters one? If they start a goofy haiku class I'll be the first in line.
Yay, a fancy trophy! -
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LOL well, I have been following all Don's haiku classes since AP started with that program. If he starts another one, I'll be there
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