time tricks us
into thinking
that everything will be all healed up
we can condition our bodies
our minds
and sometimes our love
to be that
which we think
is appropriate
but i dont want that
here
i was wanting deviation
from the commonplace
in which i resided
and here you came
in all your potential
to remind me that
life is not over just yet
for me
no
i still have a chance
even if not with you
but with myself
i keep thinking things like
if we make it until next week
i could take you to the museum
and if we make it to the week
after that one
maybe i could cook for you
and then this prompt
comes along
prodding me with unspoken words
that litter my esophagus
like cigarettes
still burning away
what if we make it past december
into the new year
and beyond
and what
what if we dont
i could go forever in circles
of what ifs
what ifs
but if i pull these blow darts
from my brain
and relieve some of the pressure
there is only
holes to be filled
and you
in which to fill them
In a list
A contest entry
- If we make it through December... by Danna Hobart.
400 points, ended December 29, 2008, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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i like it
insightful
clever
intelligent
and powerful
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Give your muse a gold star for this one! I like the fresh approach you've taken with the theme of what ifs and possibilities.
Good work,
Bill
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Great Write
It talks about possibilities and the what ifs' We can not think in what if because if does not nail down any type of certainty it only leaves the window of possibilities open and if the window of opertunity is open too long things that are certain and real will try to escape. This is a great write
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This is an amazing poem. Your imagery is so fresh. I like your use of simile too. I hope that you will think about entering my simile contest: http://allpoetry.com/contest/2430311
Thank you very much for entering my contest.
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Well, it seems to me like you've already got a pretty adventurous year ahead, and no matter what happens after December, it will be new and alive with possibilities
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How you have spun that prompt into your life is amazing.
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weird how some prompts . they hit me right where i needed it . and then out pops pieces such as this one ...
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