Truth be told:
I still love you,
and that, my dear,
will always be true.
I think the worst feeling
is being forgotten about,
by someone you'll never forget
and can never live without.
Because of you, my love,
I will never again be whole;
you stole my only heart,
which seemed to take my soul.
I know I should despise you,
I know I need to be strong,
but, for some odd reason,
I can't seem to move on.
Tales with happily ever afters
just haven’t been finished yet,
And there’s no dance number
with an amazing singing duet.
I like to pretend I’m over you;
I realize there’s no point in crying.
But if by chance the truth be told:
Everyone would know I’m lying.
Author notes
that's what you get when you let your heart win [[for contest]]
Comments
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I love this. I also hate it. I hate it because it cuts far, far too close to the truth. I'm going through this - probably like most other teenage girls on the planet - and it sucks and it hurts so badly, and then you went and put it into a poem and bring it all straight back!
Okay, so I'm kidding slightly. This is an excellent description of how I'm feeling RIGHT NOW, and you express it better than I ever could. This is a brilliant piece, flows excellently and your language choices are superb. It's just brilliant. I don;t think there's anything you could do to improve this piece. It's a brilliant take on the prompt, and I love it.
I love short-stanza(ed) poetry, I think it works. I think it's also very hard, and you've managed it perfectly. This is great.
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I love the ending. Unexpected and sudden. Sometimes it's really hard to pull off a poem with short lines and stanzas buy you have pulled it off very well. Thank you for entering my contest and good luck!!!
Megan
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