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This I Promise You Part II

Tonight there's something in you eyes
That tells me that you've lied
When you said that you were alright
Tell me, tell me how I can make it better
Tell me how I can keep a smile on your lips forever
Because that's as long I we'll be together
And when I'm with you all I ever
Want is to see your happiness in place...
Lying in your arms and smiling
To see a smile on your face
Did you know I love the way you laugh at me
I love the sparkle in your eyes
I love your arms surrounding me
I'm dying just to see that smile on your face
I love your breath, your hands, your touch, your taste
I love your sweet embrace
I confess that this is killing me
I hate anything that makes you unhappy
Tell me, what has the cruel world done to you?
Let me help you make it through
I want to be the one who will never let you down
Here and now, I make my solemn vow
That I'm everywhere you need me to be
And should I not be there for you
To help you and to see you through
Look to the sky
Right now, look at the commitment in my eyes
Let my presence be felt, in the sky you'll see me face
Like a beacon, shining grace
I'm everywhere I'm needed to be
But right now I am here
To listen and to be your confidante
That is if you want me to
I can be your friend
I've an ear to lend
And a shoulder should you need it
And all I want is to kiss away the pain
Make you pure and new like falling rain
And if you need me to be
A harbour, your safety
I will will be there
Because I love you and I care
I'll be the rock for you to stand on
When the ocean surrounds
And there's nowhere else to go
I'll be there for you
I will guide you through
This I promise you

There is a part 1 to it.... will post at request

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  • Fallen-Thumper
    July 4

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    wow this made me cry. really strong words and really powerful. i really loved this, great imagery and thanks for entering


  • trekkergirl
    January 4

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    This is very nice. I like the visual images that you use in it. Part 1 where is part 2? I have one suggestion... however, as always you don't have to do it. It is your work after all. I would suggest that you break it up into stanza's. Makes it easier to read. Stresses places that you want stressed. And all in all looks better. Doesn't scare people off because they look at it and say... shhhh that's just to long to read.

    Thanks for sharing this with us and thanks for entering it into this contest.


    • MidnightxSun
      January 4
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      This is part two, part one is available on request... I only use AP for opinions and critiques ... I post all my stuff to my livejournal... recently, I've been posting everything here too, but my earlier stuff is on LJ.

      Tbh, I prefer most of most of my work in one continuous passage, but I'll consider breaking it up