I stretch my arm and I close my punch
I look at you with fear, unsure of what to expect
You look back at me with a smile
As I know I am yours to protect
You make me feel the cold needle as it touches my skin
And slowly you push it through - piercing away all of my sins
It stings but within a moment my head starts to spin
I lie down on the ground as the world looks so thin
Content, no ache, no fears
You look at me so happily
As the sky keeps to spin around me
Your face is so pure and ghostly
You are the angel that came to save me
From my current agony
I’m so up high, painless and careless
You wrap me around your wings
And I float in a life full of dreams
My laughter is so cheerful and loud
You turn me around while we dance on this cloud
You are my perfection, you are my ecstasy.
And then everything begins to crumble;
Your angelic hands let go of me
And I slam back down on the marble floor
I start feeling sore as my stomach starts to hurt
I vomit on what used to be you
I look up with a tear running down my cheek
Searching for you; my mentor, my protector
I am so down low, fearful and lonely
The room starts spinning in the darkness
I am desperately looking for you
But you are long gone
Where have you vanished to?
Come back..
Can’t you see I am so afraid?
You are my drug
You are my heroine
Shoot me back up
Take me away with you
Dry up my tears, return with my smile
Runaway with me in that other world
Bring me back to my dream
And don’t ever wake me up again.
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powerful
i love how you compare love to a drug, as the effects are very similar.
you have done a great job here.
the flow is good,
the rhyming is well done and the story is powerful and heart felt,
i can feel your emotion showing through.
thank you for a great write!
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and then everything begins to crumble....
my favorite stanza, the harsh reality of this deceitful lover, the cold hard truth..
very well written.
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Veryu good piece. You really made it feel emotional and real. Great job with the penning! An A+ job with word usage and everything. Keep up the great work! I will be looking forward to reading and commenting on more of your work soon. i hope that you can get the chance to COMMENT back on my work, seeing as how I am sure that you and I take the same amount of love and put it into each and every piece that we write! Thanks so much for the share and again, a brilliant write!
THANKS SO MUCH!
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i really like the way you explore both the ups and downs of drug use. i especially like the lines "you are my drug, you are my heroine, shoot me back up, take me away with you."
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thank you so much for your comment.
I might actually rewrite this one to fix some parts
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THIS IS GOOD. IF U GOT TALANT LIKE THIS TAKE IT TO SOMEWHERE THAT MATTERS. CAUSE YOU COULD REALLY BE SOMETHING ONE DAY IF YOU CONTINUE TO WRITE POETRY LIKE THIS.
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