Concrete rapes my feet with cold indifference
As brumous air beguiles each turn and curve,
Then thoughts run wild to find a shorter distance
And klaxons now assault each screaming nerve.
My heel is caught by demon cracks and crannies,
My hair is limp like witch's from Macbeth,
The air turns blue from thoughts that run a riot,
Each paving stone is planning my swift death.
I catch my trembling lip between my teeth;
Each taxi in this town must be on strike,
Then as I cross a quiet intersection,
A new assassin charges with his bike.
So next time when I read sales tempting spread,
I'll close the paper and remain in bed.
Author notes
Prompt. chasing pavements
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I love the ending! It totally took me by surprise. It is well worth the reading and I'm so happy you entered my contest. Thank you.
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i love this so much! it's just so well written and intersting and just amazing! thank you so much for entering my contest and best of luck!
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I love the last lines. Me and my daughter went shopping today. I am in Miami with her. I should have stayed in bed. I am spending money like I have it to spend. LOL
The metaphors used here and ingenious. This one leaped from the page into my spirit:
"My heel is caught by demon cracks and crannies,"
I wish you well in this challenge.
Much lOVE ♥
Renee
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Clever
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This is an exceptionally good piece of poetry--literate, clever and very well-rhymed.
Excellent,
Bill
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This is brilliant! I love the twist in the last two lines! a marvellous write well done!
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shakespeare must be blessing u
for having remembered Macbeth!! Nice write Di..
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Arm yourself with an extra pair of tennis shoes/flats. Wear bold bright colors and carry a gong to hail a taxi. Sound a dangerous outing to say the least. This is either true or very creative. Ha! More than likely both.
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very cool
I love the juxtaposition of the formal sound, applied to the mundane. It must be read aloud.
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