Break me in pieces
and dance on my grave.
I’m kneeling in shackles
like a willing slave.
Crucify my senses
and slay me with a gaze.
Consumed with lustful frenzy
sets the fire ablaze.
Burn me with desire
and sear me with a caress.
Tell me that you want me
to have, hold and possess.
Hurt me like you love me,
make me scream your name.
Entice me and seduce me
so you’re the one to blame.
Author notes
Broken--Doll
Prompt:
“just like a car crash
just like a knife
my favourite weapon
is the look in your eyes”
In a list
A contest entry
- The Mystery Lyric Prompt Contest No.2 by Glasyalabolas.
1400 points, ended January 20, 2009, 13 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Deliciously dark and to paraphrase a word that you used in the poem, enticing. Certainly makes you think of dangerous, sedicious, though highly eyebrow raising actions.
Very tight and draws you right in.
Good write, congrats on gold.
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very well written...
...short and precise thoughts make verses ignite to capture the beauty in the write.
Now on the other side do look into the lines below: 'Consumed with lustful frenzy
sets the fire ablaze.'
to
'Consumed in lustful frenzy
set the fire ablaze.'
This change is simple.
Maybe you don't like adverse comments so I have refrained from making comments on other poems.
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I love this piece, its so dark and inviting, it makes me imagine things I couldnt possibly say in a comment, because it will make me all twisted and perverted and most likely foam at the mouth like a dog with rabies, which in all fairness looks like me first thing in the morning any way. But in all honesty, your writing is awsome, I wont witter on about it more, cause the poem itself does all the justice it needs.
P.S. Furry handcuffs first came from the jungle, an old Mistress who came on safari saw some giant monkeys playing with handcuffs, but thought the fur was attached to the handcuff not realising we are a big bundle of fur.
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Oh My Word~
Love the direction You took this prompt with a tight rhyme
Also words: sear me with caress
Yep that will do it
I just Love the group Ministry
Excellent take on the prompt~
Another Power piece versed~
and adore the title too
Woot
Thank You for sharing Your Talent and Spirit~
Many blessings to You in the contest Sweet One
Best wishes too
with much love & light~ Desire~*~
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No worries.
Lyric Prompt No.4 is:
“just like a car crash
just like a knife
my favourite weapon
is the look in your eyes” – from 'Stigmata' by Ministry
Many thanks.
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Ministry????????? Hell yeah!
Awesome prompt, thank you! -
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Yeah, quite partial to that one myself
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Now, using the lyrics to "Jesus built my Hotrod" would be an impossible challenge!
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