Silence,
supreme solitude;
nothing to disrupt the stillness
but my beating heart
waiting for your footsteps
which will never come.
Author notes
After a death, there are no more footsteps to listen for.
A contest entry
- Quickie ...20 poets, 20 words on a word by Thor-201.
900 points, ended December 16, 2008, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Ahhh, this is so heartbreakingly true. This really hits the spot of being alone and how death is harsh and final. The end. You should have won something for this. It is so well done.
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this is a powerful, moving piece and is so sad. It is very true that once someone passes on, we will never see them or hear their voice again. It's important to appreciate all the people in our lives while they are still with us. Thanks for sharing and keep that pen flowing.
Haley Mary
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So Sad
Wow so few words with that deep aching feeling of being Alone Forever while waiting in depression of knowing those footsteps are never going to come. Another excellent write for a quickie..
Oh I know all to well that after death, those footsteps are no longer. This one stung my heart for I too miss those footsteps of my son.
Wishing You Many Blessings
Much Love Always,
Kelle Marie
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Well written. Your words tug on my heart, especially those last two lines.
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An excellent write, but isn't it strange how long after the scent lingers on the air, you say something to yourself and you hear their voice, if only within your mind.
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I am very touched by your haunting words. Very sad, sadly true. Shancy.
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Very sad and forlorn. Good take on the prompt. Thank you for entering. Best of luck in the contest.
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Words full of imagery taken on the prompt"lonely"...As always you do a sensational job of imagery....The words seem a real situation, which I hope is not the case....Excellent!
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A beautiful piece. Good luck to you in the contest.
Much love
Ylova
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Uh, oh, has someone died? This has such a tragic feel to it, it makes me sad and also makes me think. I am often afraid of death.
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