[She never mentions the word addiction
even as he stares blindly into her eyes]
I have nothing to breathe and no words to mutter slowly. I fake a smile when the pain comes slicing its way in and destroying any progress we've made in this discovery. The cross hanging around my neck presses cool into my chest. The cross represents a faith neither you or me can explain. You wouldn't think I'd be one to wear it, much less show it. [I'm such a beautiful liar] But just so you know. I already stopped loving you.
My body gives under me as I collapse in a heap across my bed with no concern as to what lies underneath me. It's never anything important[just like in end...you weren't either] There isn't much left for me to do. I'm looking through our box. [the one that says 'May you forever rest in peace' on the outside cover] There isn't much left of you anywhere but whats left below the surface. And all our pictures and words we shared came to life in my hands. I guess I really moved on because I feel nothing. My eyes are empty of tears and emotion.
It's been years since anything has gone into it. [How the hell did we wind up like this?] I run a shaky hand through my hair that falls neatly back into a curling wave down my back. A light of gold flashes at my eyes. I remembered how worthless that necklace had been to me. I never told you, but I hadn't liked it that much. Gold was never my color.[But I dont think you ever paid attention long enough to notice that I never wore it.] At that moment I felt everything I'd long since forgotten. All that resentment and mistrust I'd replaced you with. [You were nothing to me]
I knew that burning that box would've been for the best but when you closed to begged me to keep it I just left it at that and hid the box from my sight. No one needed to know that I kept any recollection of you. I closed the box up then and shoved it into the back of my closest and covered it up with clothes I would never wear anymore.
How easily could I really let you go. [even though my love for you trickled away without a care] And soon I'll forget how your eyes shone when you were happy or how your voice sounded. Someday I'll forget you and everything we were, the good and the bad, and everything we went through together. Someday you'll forget about me too. And we'll forever erase years from our lives like they never happened. They'll become make-believe[just like you and me]]
She says she talks to Angels and they are hear her heart breaking across heavens gates without care or emotion she walks soundlessly with her head held high and not a word of what she knew her heart was screaming.
"You never loved him baby, so don't act like you care"
Author notes
I never really loved him.
I always thought I did, but I let go way to easily and walked away.
He means nothing to me now.
WishMeAway--x
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A contest entry
- we could spend rainy thursdays eating crab cakes by najji.
5000 points, ended December 17, 2008, 3 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
i dont know...honest criticism here.
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baby,
this is beautiful..but who is this about? not chad?
so sad baby, and i love the song: she talks to angels, its mega beautiful.
it's been forever baby.
loveyou.
[♥...forever]
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yeah, it is one of my favorite songs by far.
and yes, it is about chad. things are completely done between us. I havent talked to him for at least a month and a half now. I'm much happier.
I dont miss him...i dont love him anymore. Its just over.
We need to find a way to sit on the phone all night or something and talk!!
it has been a long time.
iloveyou♥
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sorry it took a while to comment.
<3 i love it.
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it's okay doll.
I'm just happy you liked it.
I had originally wanted to write a sad poem...but I got bitter and this is what I got.
lovelove
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"neither you or me" ---> "neither you nor I"
"But just so you know. I already stopped loving you." ---> "But just so you know; I already stopped loving you."
"like in end" ---> "like in the end"
"but whats left" ---> "except what's left" I think 'except' would sound better here
"I dont think" ---> "I don't think"
"they are hear her" ---> "they hear her"
"heavens gates" ---> "heaven's gates"
Sorry... It's a habit.
I quite like this piece though
Good luck in the contest
Shelly
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I wasn't looking to have perfect grammar...that is for english class.
anyway...happy you liked it though and my awful grammar didn't detract from what you got out of it. =]
thanks for the comment!
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I'm sorry, I'm a grammar PSYCHO, seriously, it's like a disease I have...
and no, it didn't detract from what I got out of it.
I forgot to mention;
I LOVED the little 'thoughts' inside the [ ] I think they really added to the realistic side of the poem
Shelly
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I tend to correct people when they are talking.
i like my little thoughts...i'm full of them.
lol.
thanks
♥lovelove
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