I set here in my silence
As the day and night are one
My equinox they become-
My thoughts of him consumes me
As the spangle of the stars, they do glow
Captivating my very being
In my heart, he becomes my bedfellow
Not having any finite
As I am the author of this Great Supreme
I foreknow this benevolence I have for him
With this credence in my veins
This region of the air expands around me
Lucidity lights my way to he
As the wlite of his purity becomes fanciful to me
This heat and light are emanating visibly
An Ador of Temper-burns within’ me
Fictile-molded into a form of art
This fable I ravish with my pen
My thought vacillate me-
With ustion passions
When I think of him
Lisa Lynn ‘08
Author notes
I wanted to add a special thank you to Swan, who had taken his own points and advertised this poem for me as a surprise. Please everyone go pay him a visit he is an excellent poet and well worth the read.
http://allpoetry.com/Swangrnv
What did you think
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I read your bio and wondered what the wlite of his purity was... I couldn't find any references. Typo maybe?
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No hun, wlite is another way to say beauty, beautiful. And I didn't write it as a center format, just left aligned, so there is no telling what form it may hold.
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Awww, sweet Swan
But I can see why: this is an intriguing poem, with a great many points to ponder over. I loved the line: 'In my heart, he becomes my bedfellow'. Sometimes if you wish hard enough, there they are...
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Hello Zaprina-Jaz, truly, thank you very much for your comment. And I agree, sometimes if you wish hard enough that a dream can actually come true...Such a nice thought anyways. Would make for a great scribe in a poem too...
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wow...this really is incredible and one can really tell that you put a ton of thought into this...the only thing that threw me off , being as young as i am, is the vocabulary but that was never my strong suit....aside from that the words really work well together and it has a beautiful flow....this truely is an amazing piece and i wish i could see more writes such as this....wonderful job!!!
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Thank you so very much Snowflake for your kind comment. I have many more scribes on my homepage here on AP, your more than welcomed to go through them if you wish, hold it as an invitation.
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Wow!
This poem is absolutely lovely... I didn't know what some of the words meant... but I could sort of guess. I like your writing style! -
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Thank you so very much Ace, if you ever need or want to kow some of the words and their meanings, please feel free to message me and just ask..
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Excellent
Ah, a very fine romantic write, with a bare hint of sensuality. You express your thoughts quite well.
Thanks for sharing this one with us.
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And thank you as well Brandy for such a kind comment........
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Ador of Temper
I knew this was going to be a "dictionary" type poem, but was delighted that it didn't happen till the last stanza for me. I can't find a definition for ador or the phrase. All in all it was a very elegant write. Nicely done -
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Thank you for your comment. Well it wasn't a dictionary poem, I am a studier of old school words though, and I like to polish up on my literature and add some uniqueness to my writings. And Ador of Temper is another meaning of Fire.
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Thanks much
It wasn't a dictionary read, just from the title I thought it was going to be. A very nice work. Thanks for the clarification.
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wow this piece is intense XF
I loved every word it is very well pen'd
great write!
keep up the good work
best of luck to you in the future and with your writing.
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Thank you so very much Redhanded, your comment is very much appreciated....
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good greatness!!
wow, this is intense..i felt very intense emotions while reading this, an absolutely engaging read my friend, truly one of my favorites from you..
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Well thank you Swan (you get me so tickled at times with your comments lol).
I am very glad to hear that you enjoyed this scribe of mine!
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